Classic Tease #399 A week of torment Please write the rest..
Howdy.
The teasers are great. The blonde in day 3, especially. But it's too much WORK to get through the tease on Day 3, because of typos, misspellings, bad syntax. The dialogue reads as if it's "canned." Sorry.
I don't mind a rather long tease, but each slide should add to the thrill. I cheated on this one before getting half-way done, just enjoying the pics.
I'm not asking for REFINED knowledge of the English language. I'm not asking for perfection. But this one surely needs to be proof-read and corrected. I gave it a "1" when I voted: not because the girls were ugly. The girls are HOT. But the way in which the tease proceeds is rather "limp." ---Doink.
The teasers are great. The blonde in day 3, especially. But it's too much WORK to get through the tease on Day 3, because of typos, misspellings, bad syntax. The dialogue reads as if it's "canned." Sorry.
I don't mind a rather long tease, but each slide should add to the thrill. I cheated on this one before getting half-way done, just enjoying the pics.
I'm not asking for REFINED knowledge of the English language. I'm not asking for perfection. But this one surely needs to be proof-read and corrected. I gave it a "1" when I voted: not because the girls were ugly. The girls are HOT. But the way in which the tease proceeds is rather "limp." ---Doink.
thx for the input. i read it through it seems fine to me and i am an english literature student
but thats not to say a good one
i would be happy for anyone to read it through, make corrections and send it back to me, i will re-post it afterwards.
let me know if any more of you think this or any other general feelings about the teases.
i would be happy for anyone to read it through, make corrections and send it back to me, i will re-post it afterwards.
let me know if any more of you think this or any other general feelings about the teases.
No, Dark.
Honestly, the problem is not the difference between English and American. Even though there are some words that are just plain DIFFERENT, both still use (or we are SUPPOSED to) the same grammar and syntax rules.
Two examples:
a) When you're speaking to someone directly (DIRECT ADDRESS) a comma ought to be used.
"Ralph, let me see your schlong."
b) "to" is not the same as "too" or "two."
You all get the idea. This is a pet peeve with me. Spelling is fundamentally important so that other people can simply RECOGNIZE the words. That's how communication happens.
---Doink.
Honestly, the problem is not the difference between English and American. Even though there are some words that are just plain DIFFERENT, both still use (or we are SUPPOSED to) the same grammar and syntax rules.
Two examples:
a) When you're speaking to someone directly (DIRECT ADDRESS) a comma ought to be used.
"Ralph, let me see your schlong."
b) "to" is not the same as "too" or "two."
You all get the idea. This is a pet peeve with me. Spelling is fundamentally important so that other people can simply RECOGNIZE the words. That's how communication happens.
---Doink.
i think dark is right, there are huge diffrences between american and english, whilst in the U.S it took me half an hour to explain what i meant by saying cheers after the guy gave me my food.
there are of coarse grammer issues.
by the way i posted the wrong day for day 6, the day i posted was unedited, i was supposed to post the other day 6 i had, after day 7 ill post the other day 6.
right no now i have some editing to do.
there are of coarse grammer issues.
by the way i posted the wrong day for day 6, the day i posted was unedited, i was supposed to post the other day 6 i had, after day 7 ill post the other day 6.
right no now i have some editing to do.
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Sorry to interupt but I will. The Week of Torment teases were not finished because of a censorship issue that happend at OD about two years ago. Someone posted a few pics of ladies in Nazi garb and the pics were taken down. So in protest to that I believe his name was "Iceman" said the he wouldn't finish the teases because of people the people complaining. Side note he was also the one responsible for all the "Sadistic" Teases.
Umm, o... k..., didn't know that. Interesting to hear some webtease history.backstrokin wrote:Sorry to interupt but I will. The Week of Torment teases were not finished because of a censorship issue that happend at OD about two years ago. Someone posted a few pics of ladies in Nazi garb and the pics were taken down. So in protest to that I believe his name was "Iceman" said the he wouldn't finish the teases because of people the people complaining. Side note he was also the one responsible for all the "Sadistic" Teases.
Just to be clear: This site doesn't allow this kind of content either! Sorry, Iceman.



