3 hours of hell

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That was good... waiting for the next try....
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Delightful! Maybe the stakes should be raised next time, and he becomes her slave if he loses. :-P

My only suggestion is to take your time when writing and pay more attention to detail. This felt a little bit rushed.
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i thought it was brilliant. although it does remind me that I'm probably never going to find a woman as wonderful as this.
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