Im looking for some help improving an erotic story.

[Snot]

Mostly I need help with grammar errors. I'm a very poor writer for the most part so if anyone is interested in helping me improve on it it would be awesome.

It's an erotic story I'm writing my wife and at the moment I'm not all that happy with it. It's around 6 pages long at 10point font so it shouldn't be a long read.

I'll either post it here or attach it if anyone is interested.

[SexualChoc]

I am not the one to edit for grammer

http://www.milovana.com/forum/viewtopic ... 00#p122400
use the above linked forum
it has several good and free spelling and grammar checkers

[Incubo]

I'll look it over if you like.
Just send it to me.

[Snot]

Thanks for the link's The Paper Rater found much more than my MS Word did.

Thanks so much Incubo, I'll happily take you up on the offer. I've attached the file here as I wasn't able to via pm.

I truly appreciate any help you're willing to give.

[Incubo]

Here you go.
Wasn't really all that much wrong with it. A few punctuation things and a couple incorrect homonyms, but not all that many.

*Note: I made no literary changes. Only grammar.

[Kaitriot]

Sorry but I've only managed to get 2 and half pages in. It's quite a big one. The story of course ;)

I turned on "track changes" so you can see what amends I've made/suggested. You don't have to use any of them. I won't be offended. I did however feel that when you use the word "Master", it often needed the word "your" before it. I don't feel it reads well without it, but that's my opinion. I only put it in one place as I thought it'll be easier to mention it here then adding them throughout the document.

I couldn't attach it in PM, even after changing the extension name randomly a number of times so I'm posting it here.

I'm away for the next couple of days so won't be able to offer any more time reading through it. But good luck with it and hope you get the reaction you want from your wife.

[Snot]

Thanks so much for all the help! I truly appreciate it.