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Post by dix »

Not a bad tease, but I have a little bit of constructive criticism if I may.

Using "txt speak" in teases is a real turn off. There's no need for it either as there's no real limitations on the amount of characters that you can use.

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what's txt speak?
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Nezhul wrote:what's txt speak?
Too lazy now to go see for myself.



WOW

Not an expert on this!!!!


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Nezhul wrote:what's txt speak?
Too lazy now to go see for myself.
A certain sense of irony in that.

Txt speak is basically using shortened words and acronyms. OMG, WTF, TTYL etc. Basically used to take up less space and enable you to type quicker back in the day when SMS's were limited to a set number of characters and phones didn't have QWERTY keyboards.

I just don't think it has a place in teases that's all.

Just my 2 pence though.

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The lack of punctuation and proper grammar doesn't make it any better.

It's not really my kind of tease anyway (so I didn't rate it), but that should be improved in my opinion :-)
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Hm. So it's called txt speak in english? In russian we have a special word for such shortened phrases.

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I don't think the wording is that much of a distraction but the kleenex thing isn't for me. If it would have ended with the man's legs over his head and he had to ejaculate into his mouth, that would be have been a great ending. In my opinion that is.
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