Evening with Leah

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Evening with Leah

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Hey

here you can leave your final message for the tease if you want to. It could be either a conclusion or just your opinion what could've been better. Or you could tell me, if there're any bugs, cuz its not even working probably on my computer...
Every little helps :-)

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Re: Evening with Leah

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I thought it was really great.

I loved the multiple-slides for long periods, rather than 3 minutes staring at the same slide/text. Four 15-second slides are more exciting than a 1 minute slide even if it's the same pic and different text. I wish more authors would do that.

The length was good too, for me.

The tone was awesome. I prefer an encouranging "let's have fun together" tone to a "you are slime" approach... I've never understood how a domme calling a guy a worm doesn't demean both of them.

The only thing I can think of that I'd've changed is to, very near the end, change the cool-off time after an edge from 10 seconds to 5, just to give it an even greater sense of momentum.
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Re: Evening with Leah

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This is in the wrong forum, btw. It should be moved to "The Art of Webteasing"
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Re: Evening with Leah

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Thanks camel for your review, I really appreciate you liked the tease. But I can't actually move this thread, can I?
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