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Hi everyone,
This is a topic that has been written about often, but i want to bring it up again. It's my opinion, and i know many of you may differ in your views, but i'd like to bring this once more. Essentially, i want to point out that, while those of you who take the time and go to the effort to create teases obviously put a lot into the effort, seemingly small things can undermine your hard work for many of us, and they are easily corrected.
To me, poor grammer and incorrect spelling are just plain show stoppers, and those two characteristics seem to be hallmarks of far too many of the recent teases. Run-on sentences that lack punctuation are just hard to follow, and instantly break the mood. (Imagine, in "real life" attempting to submit to a Domme, a superior being, who surprised you by praddling along incoherently; She wouldn't seem so superior, would She?)
Having read these discussions before, i know that some of you will argue that this does not bother you, which is fine (for you), but for many of us these issues absolutely ruin otherwise potentially exciting teases. i respect the hard work and effort that all of you who create teases put into your projects; proofreading and editing will make them great teases for everyone.
The other comment i'd like to make is that some of the teases pursue oddly unrealistic themes. Setting the scene wherein the person being teased is supposedly in a chastity device and then telling them to stroke themselves, ordering the sub to stroke for 5 to 10 minutes per page, telling them, at the outset that they mut have items that, frankly, most guys just won't have access to....these are easily modified elements of many teases that can be adjusted a bit to make for an easier tease to follow and obey. i'm all for challenging teases, use of toys and props, long, demanding sessions, and when i do a tease i try to obey it perfectly. In some cases you wonderful authors might do a check for practicality before publishing.
Enough? Thanks for your consideration of this perspective. To those of you who create teases here, all of you, thank you for making this a great site!

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Is grammer a word ?
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whacker44 wrote:Is grammer a word ?
nice one.... :lol:

but still im no grammar genius myself...
and i agree with vor...
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well im not so good in english, because that is not my language, so I spell crap, and have wrong gramma but I understand what you mean, and I agree with it that we need to do our best to writhe corect but it donssent work to check out every singel word in a dictionary
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LOL! No, grammer is NOT a word! Grammer is! Thank you for noticing! This is a good example that, even with proofreading, most of us still make mistakes, and i don't pretend to be above that. Hopefully though my point about gross mistakes in structure is worth discussion?

I also didn't suggest that tease creators need to check every word in a dictionary when creating their teases...
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vor wrote:LOL! No, grammer is NOT a word! Grammer is! Thank you for noticing! This is a good example that, even with proofreading, most of us still make mistakes, and i don't pretend to be above that. Hopefully though my point about gross mistakes in structure is worth discussion?

I also didn't suggest that tease creators need to check every word in a dictionary when creating their teases...
Sorry, I didnt read your message carefuly enough and when I replayed I thinked it was spelling over all in forum etc...

But absolute the tease creattors need to think one more time before they are done with the story..

But i think I went :offtopic: in my last replay
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So what's the solution to the proofreading issue? This issue has been discussed before with no solution.

I recommend the Milovana community have a list of people who are willing to proofread teases under Technical Support. If a writer needs help with proofreading they have a list of people they can contact.

The list could be updated periodically. People could also indicate when they are available to proofread. However, there needs to be a response time agreed upon yes/no so the tease writer isn't left wondering if the volunteer he has contacted is going to proofread his tease. Also once someone agrees to proofread the tease, he needs to complete the proofreading in a timely manner so the tease writer can post his tease.
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How about incorporating a spell checker in the tease editors?

There are plenty completely free resources on the net toward that end.
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Another option is type your script in a word processing program such a Microsoft Word and use the Spelling/Grammar tool to find common mistakes. Then paste the corrected script into the tease editor.
Powerpoint also has that function.
janmb wrote:How about incorporating a spell checker in the tease editors?

There are plenty completely free resources on the net toward that end.
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Virtually any text editor worth a dime does... It's still a second-to-best solution though, since the minority of authors will think about/take the hassle with doing that...

What you would gain from embedded spell checking here in the tease editors directly would be that all users would be far more encouraged and reminded about using good spelling/grammar. :-)
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Agreed. Using a text editor is a second best solution. However, until the tease editors incorporate spell/grammar check, an interim solution will have to be found. However, suggesting a spell/grammar check is a good start.
janmb wrote:Virtually any text editor worth a dime does... It's still a second-to-best solution though, since the minority of authors will think about/take the hassle with doing that...

What you would gain from embedded spell checking here in the tease editors directly would be that all users would be far more encouraged and reminded about using good spelling/grammar. :-)
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I have a simple solution just make. A program that automatically inserts a full. Stop every seven words that way even. The most confusing set of instructions will. Be broken up into easy to read. Sentences.
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cumhardy wrote:I have a simple solution just make. A program that automatically inserts a full. Stop every seven words that way even. The most confusing set of instructions will. Be broken up into easy to read. Sentences.
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cumhardy wrote:I have a simple solution just make. A program that automatically inserts a full. Stop every seven words that way even. The most confusing set of instructions will. Be broken up into easy to read. Sentences.
Or to.
Simplify your.
Method even.
More, make.
Paragrpahs, after.
Each sentence.
And Points.
After each.
Two words.
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Post by les »

I always see a great big solid block of text as daunting,
And hard to read,
As it is difficult to follow line by line.

I find that I use line breaks as punctuation marks,
As a matter of course,
This tends to make,
Even the most complicated ideas easier to follow.

With paragraph breaks as a change of thought.

Even in my day to day emails,
And posts.

So cumhardy's idea cold become:

I have a simple solution just make.
A program that automatically inserts a full.
Stop every seven words that way even.
The most confusing set of instructions will.
Be broken up into easy to read.
Sentences.

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