Prove yourself - the ultimatum - feedback

[gah]

This was my first tease so I hope it was ok. Any feedback is welcome. If there’s enough interest I could continue the series.

Perhaps we could have a vote on who the testing girls and girlfriend should be and what she should be like (from sweet to scheming and vengeful. Should she be ignorant of what her friends are doing to you or should she be organizing and rigging the whole test in the background etc.)

[gah]

ps it was a real bitch leaving the name of the girl open so forgive any awkward dialogue that resulted from that

[clamps]

killed it mate. One of the best. Keep it up.

[petethesub]

Fantastic tease, i hope there will be a lot more of them. Great work. Just one tiny complaint 'loser' only has one 'o', otherwise, i loved it. cheers

[yesofcourse]

i really enjoy the whole tease i like the frustrating feeling i have now.. very well done pls continue the series.. one of best teases ive done lately

[gah]

I think I fixed all the typos. Thanks for the encouragement. I'll see if I can make a few more.

Any feedback on where the series should go? I can't decide between:
1. Drawing it out and making a few softer teases where they test you.
2. Moving it along to the slavery after you fail.

1. Revealing the whole test thing to just be a ploy to get blackmail material.
2. Making the test genuine with a pass branch to the story.

[markle]

I think there should definitely be a number of teases and creative tests to pass along with realistic punishments for failure (i say realistic - i'm never putting icy-hot on my junk again!!) You could make punishments more difficult as you go. I would enjoy more real life tasks to perform as opposed to just series of edging

A separate webtease for the eventual failure would be excellent. Loved the model - love to see more of her. I think the girlfriend should be oblivious to the testing but somehow get her involved with the teasing without her knowledge.

Loved the tease - took me long time to memorize everything with much trial and error and restarts. Hope you haven't given up on project - looking forward to more!