Playing House - Negative & (hopefully) Constructive Feed

[camel]

Some might like it, and I appreciate any effort on this site & topic, but for me, the "Playing House" tease turned me off.

I thought hard about posting this because I don't want people to be afraid to post teases, even if they fear they won't be good. I decided to post because I want to see the tone of this forum as one where we can share good and bad opinions with respect. With almost no exceptions, IMO, any art is good art if it provokes a response. (example) Here's mine:

- The underage tone really turned me off. Underage is never a positive, but sometimes its not too much of a negative for me if the tone is right. This one's tone didn't seem seductive, demanding, taboo, confident, manipulative, or even innocent to me... it just made her seem immature.

- Additionally, words like "spermies" turn me off unless she's the type to find the word funny. Sense of humor turns me on. A 40 year old woman saying "No spooty for you!" is fun. Instead, I'd expect this girl to use the word "poopies" instead of "shit", and still be embarassed about it. (Hmmm... I might like a personality that teased but didn't know what she was doing, and therefore might have that vocabulary and trigger my "immature/yech" reflex constructively, I dunno, never thought about it before. I love how even teases I don't like trigger fantasy possibilities!)

- Paragaphs. Nothing creates a distance between the reader and the story like a looooong paragraph. Every blank line triggers a "did you get that?" response in people's brain, and easy paragraphs mean easy digestion. Just as it's hard to enjoy the ride if you constantly need to readjust your chair, it's hard to enjoy a story if it's too hard to read. (and yes I know these paragraphs might be a little too long as well. Please read my comments as help, not judgement. Hell, I haven't even made a tease yet.)

- I saw a "cock fast 20 times" in quotes on page 5 and it completely blew any flow I had because I had to stop and reread it, thinking "Did I miss something? Why was that in quotes? Does she think of that as slang?" It only took me two or three seconds to figure out it was a mistake, but it destroyed all momentum.

- I thought she was kind of ugly, and by ugly I mean that there was no inner beauty or spark that shined through. She could have been a "10" and she still would have turned me off. If she would have smiled or looked anything other than someone who wasn't sure she wanted to be there, she might have been diferent. I've seen plenty of women that don't immediately look great but look better and better as more pictures start filling in a personality/context/tone, but this photo set wasn't one of them.

So... I hope I wasn't

[whacker44]

thank you for comments..mostly i tend to think you are probably right..i did not mean to sugget thst she was underage..but immature...being tease by immature women is a turn on for me..who knows the only thing i really disagree with is that i think she was very beautiful..i really prefer to see a woman in the natural state as to the many done up babes that inhabit the teases...although there is nothing wrong with them Thanks again

[dark]

I agree whacker44 i also like it more when a woman looks like a woman and not like painted puppet About the other points i can't say anything, because i didn't read it. But i will

[Salerio]

I agree, I didn't get much out of it - that being said, 80% of everything created on this site doesn't really appeal to me. Most teases I'll glance at and never actually bother doing.

That being said, no reason for anyone to stop doing anything. My 20% of awesome favourities is distinct from every other person's set of favourites, and I guarantee there are lots of people out there who enjoy every single tease, but it's a fact that any tease has it's haters as well.

I'd like to be able to sort all the teases. I know there's a few Classics I really enjoy, and continually hunting them down is a pain. Especially with seraph's amazing work, the site seems to be growing by leaps and bounds, and I can easily forsee a time when there may well be 100 main pages of teases, most of which I don't care for.

[seraph0x]

I'd like to be able to sort all the teases. I know there's a few Classics I really enjoy, and continually hunting them down is a pain. Especially with seraph's amazing work, the site seems to be growing by leaps and bounds, and I can easily forsee a time when there may well be 100 main pages of teases, most of which I don't care for.

Hmm, what do you mean by sorting? I'm currently working on filtering by tag. Sorting by rating and browsing by author will probably also be possible soon.

Anything else that could help you find what you need?