Feedback: Kenna Keyholder

slaveashish · Post by **slaveashish** » Wed Apr 29, 2015 1:04 pm

bennygrimm,

Absolutely loved this tease

. Great idea and the delivery is excellent as well. The fact that this is your first tease makes it all the more special. I hope that there are many more to come.

Thanks,
Ashish

Sisyphuster · Post by **Sisyphuster** » Wed Apr 29, 2015 10:57 pm

I agree!

teased · Post by **teased** » Thu Apr 30, 2015 6:50 am

bennygrimm · Post by **bennygrimm** » Thu Apr 30, 2015 1:08 pm

Thanks all! Appreciate the feedback!

mr-max · Post by **mr-max** » Thu Apr 30, 2015 9:06 pm

I liked it as well. Great model, nice idea!

In the end it got a bit rapid. After the really nice slow build up of the story it was a bit quick and fast paced in the end for my taste! ;)

Moaning on high level here.

bennygrimm · Post by **bennygrimm** » Fri May 01, 2015 3:27 am

You're absolutely right. I set a page limit for myself to try and prevent rambling, and so the ending got really contracted. There's a reasonable likelihood of a part two or something that expands the story though.

ruinforyoo · Post by **ruinforyoo** » Mon Aug 03, 2015 4:46 pm

Loved it. So original. Thanks

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