I don't know what's gotten into me. This one is so freaking long, it truly is ridiculous. It may just take you all day to get through it. I know it took me a long time to make it.
Anyway, enjoy. And, as always, please give me feedback. If you like it, let me know. If you don't like it, that's cool, too. I always want to know what would make people happier.
Feedback for Spending the day with Ariel
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blue_down_under
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Just a bit of constructive criticism...
One thing I've always noticed with your teases is that there is usually very little text (comparatively) on each page, and it's something that really became apparent on this tease. Personally I'd like to see more words on each page, because changing page all the time gets really repetitive after 180 odd pages.
One thing I've always noticed with your teases is that there is usually very little text (comparatively) on each page, and it's something that really became apparent on this tease. Personally I'd like to see more words on each page, because changing page all the time gets really repetitive after 180 odd pages.
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That is something I tend to do. I think it's because when I find a model I like, I get excited and try to find all I can. But then I end up with a large group of pics, and have to spread my idea for a tease across all of them. So, I think my words get sparse on long ones or if it's a series.
I'd like to hear from other people. Do you prefer more pictures to look at with fewer words, or fewer pictures with more words?
BTW - Blue, thank you for the constructive criticism.
I'd like to hear from other people. Do you prefer more pictures to look at with fewer words, or fewer pictures with more words?
BTW - Blue, thank you for the constructive criticism.
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susanrhodes
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Great tease
Epic tease, thanks again Submatt.
I'd say somewhere inbetween is ideal, in terms of text quantity. Maybe 3-4 sentences, on average. I've definitely enjoyed some of the multiple-paragraphs per pic teases, and some of the one sentence per pic ones. It depends partly on how well it's integrated with the pictures. For example, I thought the rapid picture changing worked well with Ariel because the text moved you around her body along with the pictures. And it worked well as a crazy long tease, because the story was supposed to be about a very long day.
I guess what I'm saying here is I thought the pacing worked very well for this tease, but in general I agree with blue, I prefer a little more text per pic. Then again, I like variety.
I'd say somewhere inbetween is ideal, in terms of text quantity. Maybe 3-4 sentences, on average. I've definitely enjoyed some of the multiple-paragraphs per pic teases, and some of the one sentence per pic ones. It depends partly on how well it's integrated with the pictures. For example, I thought the rapid picture changing worked well with Ariel because the text moved you around her body along with the pictures. And it worked well as a crazy long tease, because the story was supposed to be about a very long day.
I guess what I'm saying here is I thought the pacing worked very well for this tease, but in general I agree with blue, I prefer a little more text per pic. Then again, I like variety.