Feedback: Indiscretion Part 1: Mistakes

[1885]

For me, the only negative is that the story is too emotional. When I put myself in the story, I feel bad for what I've done. And that's not so much fun.

While I've been focusing on building the story with the initial parts of this series, the choices you make in the upcoming parts will begin to matter more and more, so redemption could end up within your grasp. Or slip through your fingers entirely. All I'm saying is, keep the faith, brother.

Spoiler: show

I've been looking for a tease that made me ruin multiple orgasms in a row, and this one not only did that, but did it so beautifully and sexily, and each one of them was unexpected. Normally I can't ruin more than one of my orgasms before my resolve slips and I enjoy the next one, but this was truly brilliant.

If you haven't already, I highly suggest you check out Nezhul's I Will Drain You: http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=10249. It's awesome and will be right up your alley.

[janmb]

For Alex, also check the later parts of the Giving up control series by Decker. The entire series is awesome, but there is one of the later ones in chapter 2 focusing a lot on "barely ruined" orgasms. Very difficult and very entertaining

[1885]

For Alex, also check the later parts of the Giving up control series by Decker. The entire series is awesome, but there is one of the later ones in chapter 2 focusing a lot on "barely ruined" orgasms. Very difficult and very entertaining

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=8966

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=9101

Ahh, Jessica... You always were my favorite. Sorry, Audrey.

[spacerat]

omg, that tease is awesome. Keep up the great story. Can't wait for the next part

[d3vi0n]

5 parts till now :) great series... i love them

[cactusman]

I "read" through this series, and I liked it a lot. I don't usually do flash teases, but I wanted to see why it got such high ratings. I think the writing is very strong, although the tease is very static in the way it uses the same picture over and over again. Often the pictures don't change for a very long time. Which just goes to show how important the story is in a webtease.

I'm glad you haven't gotten too much feedback saying that it was to heavy on the story, just from the cronic complainer Nezhul:

And for me there's too much story. It's distracting

My advice is to just ignore such complaints and keep writing what you like. And more of it! I appreciate the work you've done and look forward to more of it.

[Human]

I quite liked the first tease in the series. Very nice photos.

I looked through the third tease, did not like that. It wakes up my dominant and logical and ethical side.

[elvisomar]

1885, please keep up the great work. Story-wise, this has been one of my favorite teases here, bar none.

I have to admit, all along I have been secretly wishing that Georgia would take control over "our hero" and Brooke, and make them both serve her whims.

Whatever happens, I'll keep playing along. Thanks!

[1885]

Very well done, 1885! Thank you for showing me another side of flash-based teasing!

Thank you so much, Indigo. One thing that bothers me about flash teases sometimes is being forced to wait at pages too long. There's a lot of instances where the girl tells you to stroke or wait, and then you just sit there looking at a timer counting down from however long. I always thought it would be a lot hotter to stroke during that time and have the girl constantly taunt you or turn you on with flowing dialogue. No one ever put together a flash tease that way, so I finally decided to just give it a shot. Hands-free dialogue was born!

I "read" through this series, and I liked it a lot. I don't usually do flash teases, but I wanted to see why it got such high ratings. I think the writing is very strong, although the tease is very static in the way it uses the same picture over and over again. Often the pictures don't change for a very long time. Which just goes to show how important the story is in a webtease.

It's hard to fill so many words with so few pictures, though if anyone knows that it's certainly you. Most of the picture sets I have to work with are between 15-20 pictures total, and I try to make the best use of them I can. You know, funny thing... Before I started writing teases, I didn't even really know where to get pictures for them. Your badgirlsblog post made me aware of that site, and surfing through pictures I couldn't help but get crazy ideas. And while I see myself as following in the footsteps of my personal hero nwo69 with the extreme nature of his works, you had a hand in getting me started in this by showing me a source of pictures to draw from. So thank you sincerely for that.

My advice is to just ignore such complaints and keep writing what you like. And more of it! I appreciate the work you've done and look forward to more of it.

Writing what I like is all I can do. Honestly I'm amazed so many people like it so much, but if we're all on the same page, more power to us! Down in the darkness we go!

[The79]

I'd like to start off by saying, great series so far! I just finished part 5, and my comments are directed at all, not just part 1. The story is interesting and sexy, and you picked a great model.

I'd only have one criticism which is that our decisions don't have any impact. The PUSH/YIELD thing in part 4 was cool, but out of curiosity I went through it a second time doing the other option, and it ended the same. If there was some effect, yielding and not placing the camera to get on her good side, or pushing hard enough to actually win, it would really add to the tease.

Still, far better than the average tease, thank you for writing it!

[Quazwierdcev283]

1885.
I,like many others, I'm sure, have been following your indiscretion series from the beginning I love your style. Every chapter has a new twist that I never see coming (cumming? ;) ) I was blown away by the ending of chapter 5 and 6 and, am eagerly awaiting the rest of them. You have an amazing talent and a creative mind. I don't know if I've ever seen such talent before. Keep up the good work.
MAJOR kudos on an amazing series,
a devoted fan,
Quaz.
P.S. if you have any idea for a tease that aren't as good as your previous ones, post them anyway! It will give others hope (look not all of his teases are perfect!).

[DrPain]

I agree ... I have only done parts 1 and 2 properly so far, but they are truly astonishing. Many thanks for an amazing contribution.

[casualthunder]

Really loving the series ...I think you got the timing in the flash teases just right (hate waiting around for neverending timers) and the story is fantastic, a secret fantasy of mine actually haha

If I did have one gripe though its that the model you have used for 'Brooke' is far too glamorous to be the stereotypical average vanilla style wife. To make the story appear more realistic the wife should have been a slightly older and average looking model, something like the following perhaps....

http://www.momhairypussy.com/Michelle170511/index.html

but that is a very minor criticism on what is a fantastic series, keep up the great work!!!

...also I would love to have had the option of being able to overpower Georgia as well, turn the tables on her in a role reversal style etc. ....maybe on your next tease?

[Human]

1885, you are very talented, I would just request that you write teases that do not encourage infidelity.
Encourage might not be the word I'm looking for..."make it acceptable" is more appropriate?
Something like the wife/gf finding the guys fetish and then teasing the heck out of him...

[1885]

1885, you are very talented, I would just request that you write teases that do not encourage infidelity.
Encourage might not be the word I'm looking for..."make it acceptable" is more appropriate?