Feedback: Indiscretion Part 1: Mistakes

[thedane]

I just want to say that is my favorite tease of all times. Very well done!

[uberbear01]

Absolutely agree, this is such a fantastic piece of work. Thoroughly enjoyed that and really got caught up in the whole situation. How often do you say that?! It's testament to a great bit of writing - so genuinely, thank you for the time and effort that went into this! I gave it a 5.

[AtTheEdge]

fine work!

[Oda]

I have to admit... that was awesome!

[sxxx_fxxx]

I agree, THE best tease on this website. REALLY looking forward to part 2.

Not my cuppa tea being totally denied; would love to see an option at the start to allow, leave it to chance, deny, or ruin.

Other than that I loved it, there was a lot of detail.


Does anyone know what happens if you clicked an option that she told you not to do? like tell her you were going to call the police? I didnt want to click the option incase it ended the tease.

[Nezhul]

She threatens you she'll tell the wife, and you end up naked anyway.

[1885]

Does anyone know what happens if you clicked an option that she told you not to do? like tell her you were going to call the police? I didnt want to click the option incase it ended the tease.

She threatens you she'll tell the wife, and you end up naked anyway.

Like the man said. I'm actually not a big fan of teases that abruptly end if you talk back to the domme or offend her somehow. While the choices in my first tease had a bigger impact on the direction of what happened, Indiscretion focuses more on the narrative, so you don't ever have to worry about picking a choice and hitting a dead end. The choices are there to give you a chance to respond how you would naturally, for the sake of immersion.

And a big round of appreciation for everyone who left their thoughts here. I came out swinging harder than I realized, and I thank everyone for the support.

[supermokkori]

Indiscretion focuses more on the narrative, so you don't ever have to worry about picking a choice and hitting a dead end. The choices are there to give you a chance to respond how you would naturally, for the sake of immersion.

And a big round of appreciation for everyone who left their thoughts here. I came out swinging harder than I realized, and I thank everyone for the support.

1885, I'm new to Milovana and have been "researching" the various Flashteases as I work on finishing my first one in the next couple of days. Not only did you swing harder than you realized, you hit a freaking homerun in terms of the intriguing plot and storytelling. I don't mean to offend other Flashtease creators, but your Flashtease is by far the most well-written Flashtease I've had the pleasure reading.

What I really like is future possibilities of this storyline and where it may lead. I think I have an idea where the plotlines may lead and I really look forward to seeing if I'm right with my guesses.

[tallguy2241]

An excellent tease. Looking forward to part 2.

[Nezhul]

And for me there's too much story. It's distracting.

[janmb]

Looks like great work for sure

Currently obligated elsewhere, but looking forward to try it in the future

[T-rix]

Firstly, an incredibly well written tease, 1885. In flash dialogues I prefer to be able to click continue and control the pace of the "conversation" myself as I find the timing never quite right, but yours was very good and the continue options for instructions were very welcome. I kept clicking the "Fuck you" options when they came up to see what would happen and after a few tries it was

Spoiler: show

obvious there were no alternate paths

.

Looking forward to what's next

[slutty1]

Just another reader chiming in to say how impressed I am with the writing in your teases, 1885. Really great work in terms of developing the characters and creating an immersive story. You've also managed to include timers on pages that just feature text in a way that isn't annoying, which is a rare feat as well.

For me, the only negative is that the story is too emotional. When I put myself in the story, I feel bad for what I've done. And that's not so much fun. :) Personally, I prefer a bit lighter tone. Nevertheless, I can't wait to check out part 3 later tonight! Thanks for all the effort you've obviously been putting into these teases.

[brian]

Just wanted to day these teases are the best on the site. The writing and storyline is brilliant.
Can't wait to continue with #3 after work. Keep up the great work, hope there's more to come.

And thank you!

[Alexander The Denied]

Parts one and two were great, but part three was hands down the best tease I've ever done.

Spoiler: show

I've been looking for a tease that made me ruin multiple orgasms in a row, and this one not only did that, but did it so beautifully and sexily, and each one of them was unexpected. Normally I can't ruin more than one of my orgasms before my resolve slips and I enjoy the next one, but this was truly brilliant.

Thanks a lot, and I can't wait for the next one.