New Life

[doink]

Lovely models. The dialogue doesn't serve its purpose, though. This tease was created by someone whose first language is not English. I admire anyone who can function in a different language, but the tease-text needs to be correct in terms of syntax, spelling and grammar. It's too much work for an English-speaker to try to get through the various mistakes and actually get aroused.
Sorry. ---doink.

[Qwert]

You right i dont speak english well.But if someone decide to correct my mistakes then pm to me.
ps(If your native language is English then if you can not correct mistakes in this simple tease than you cant know your language very well or you are lazy . Sorry too)
ps2(This no attack for your critical opinion. All criticism is needed. I can learn for that what mistakes i do and try avoid them in future).

[il]

The problem isn't that we can't figure out what you're saying, the problem is that if we have to try to figure it out it's harder to get turned on by it.

[joeliwan]

I personally thought this was a GREAT tease. It was simple, the model was great, and there was a LOT of edging.

But it is unfortunately true that the improper syntax and grammar pulled me out of it until you got to the simple instructions.

So, to those who have trouble with staying aroused in that situation, what I do is pretend that the model is some exotic European woman who doesn't speak English well, but condescends to use my language since I can't speak hers. Give it a try, it can be fun.

To Qwert, if you're serious about wanting to fix the grammar I'll go through it for you. I can't promise perfection, but I'm free help. Reply here if you want me to go through the tease again and send you the edited text.

~joeliwan

[Qwert]

I talk seriously about that. I send you text in pm. My previous teases is are fixed too becouse in orginal wersion has mass mistakes. Thanks all people who correct them.