FB: The Mysterious House

[Uberman]

After failing on creating a new "Cock Hero"-part (Look at it here if you don't know what I'm talking about) I decided to make a flash tease instead. Pretty bad timing if you ask me since an epic flash tease was released just some days ago lol...

I would really appreciate any feedback given!

[jlx666]

really nice, added to favs

btw, is it correct, that red and white doors lead to the same place?

[Bondageman]

I thought it was a fantastic tease. That's exactly the kind of tease that I like, namely walking around a house trying to get out scenario, not knowing what awaits you in the next room (that's why so many of my Diva teases follow that format - all be it not normally in flash).

I'm not really a fan of timers and I was glad to see yours were quite short with the pics and writing changing all the time as well which was good. Not taking anything away from your tease (because as I said it's brilliant - 5*), but I would have added a bit of pain in there as well - just to stop things getting a little repetitive - but that's just my personal taste.

Great work!

[hhhobo]

Excellent work. Lots of anticipation as to what was coming next - really keeps the user on edge - literally. I like the choices and I like the variation from one room to another. I hope you'll keep writing this kind of tease.

[SMGhost]

Absolutely excellent!

[offly71]

great tease...Really fantastic
But i have a question iin the end i choose the 4th door and then the pool. but it doesn't continue it only tell me to relax and she will give aa blowjob then nothing...
bye
thank you for that beautifull tease

[Nezhul]

Made it to the end and chosen door 1.

A few remarks.
1) unfortunately in the beginning both doors lead to the same place. Not sure why did you do that? Well, whatever.
2) The girl near the pool told me to give 200 strokes and not to taqke too long. Now I'v done them in a pretty fast tempo (like 2/sec or even faster), but still when I was at ~170-180, the page changed. Let alone this - it took me back intot he library. Was it intended? Pretty strange, really. Few minutes ago we disappointed the library girl, and now her memory was erased and she's ready for us again.

3) didn't like the girl with tum-tum. The idea itself is interesting, but that much stroking made the skin on my shaft sore, that's all.
4) The tease surely could use more edging. Basically there's only 1 part with it (near the pool), while all others make you just stroke, stroke.... Gets boring. I wonder, how many pumps I did? 2000? more? I think the next tease should have more edging. Try to mix it - first you get to stroke for a few minutes, than give a few edges...

voted 5. Rare quality. Tho it has some flaws. But it looks very good in front of most teases here (sorry if I hurt someone's feelings, that's IMHO - no more)

[Uberman]

really nice, added to favs

btw, is it correct, that red and white doors lead to the same place?

Thanks! Yes, that's correct. Was going to have two choices there... might fix that eventually. For now I will lock one of the doors to make it more "realistic".

I thought it was a fantastic tease. That's exactly the kind of tease that I like, namely walking around a house trying to get out scenario, not knowing what awaits you in the next room (that's why so many of my Diva teases follow that format - all be it not normally in flash).

I'm not really a fan of timers and I was glad to see yours were quite short with the pics and writing changing all the time as well which was good. Not taking anything away from your tease (because as I said it's brilliant - 5*), but I would have added a bit of pain in there as well - just to stop things getting a little repetitive - but that's just my personal taste.

Great work!

Thank you! Unfortunately there are no pain in that dimension.

Excellent work. Lots of anticipation as to what was coming next - really keeps the user on edge - literally. I like the choices and I like the variation from one room to another. I hope you'll keep writing this kind of tease.

Thanks!

Absolutely excellent!

great tease...Really fantastic
But i have a question iin the end i choose the 4th door and then the pool. but it doesn't continue it only tell me to relax and she will give aa blowjob then nothing...
bye
thank you for that beautifull tease

Thanks! As for the 4th door and then the pool there aren't supposed to be any timers. I made some changes to it now though to make it more clear!

Made it to the end and chosen door 1.

[lots of feedback )

The great Nezhul!

1) As I posted above, I was going to make two choices... but didn't come up with anything... Will lock one of the doors and then open it up in the future if I come up with something.
2) Yep, you're right... made the timers longer. Also fixed the "back to library" thing.
3) So there IS pain in the tease after all? But yeah, I will add a "stop" button.
4) Will do that in future teases!

[Nezhul]

don't think stop button is a good idea - the tease is fine and will be quite difficult to someone.

Just remember to do something more divercive in the future. Check out other teases like yours - like Neverending story, Stroke for me, etc...
They all have less of plain stroking and more edging. And if they DO have just stroking for a long time, that's a task on it's own and doesn't happen often.
If you look at it, there's about as much edging as stroking minutes.
Also, you have too much "100 strokes" pages. Like 6 or 7 all in all.
I'd recommend you to look at other "best" stroking teases, like series above, or Ritz teases, to come up with more different ideas next time.

And remember - noone asks you to make something new. Just try so every activity in a tease won't last longer than 3-5 minutes. Better do 5-6 slightly different tasks. Like in your story - one girl will tease you with 6-7 minutes of slow stroking, the other will ask edging, the next one will have you stroking pretty fast to the beat, and the girl after that will have you edge in time to secret timers.
Also, I think that while stroking if you edge before you are allowed - you should be "punished" with holding thaqt edge, or more edging... Or after a rest you just pushed back a bit in a stroking sequence, so you have more to do than there would be if you didn't edged...

All in all your style matches my interest's the best way. Girls don't tend to humiliate you - they are playing. Also tasks are good, and that's there is no pain - it totally my thing.
If you'd like, you are most wellcome in this thread : http://www.milovana.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=6027

[alchemi183]

This tease is fucking brilliant! I loved it. It has immediately earned a place in my favorite three or four teases. Thank you, thank you!

I know that everyone is different in what they like, and maybe I was just the right level of aroused before I started the tease, but it was just perfect for me. Unlike a previous comment you got, I liked the sets of 100 strokes. I thought the drummer girl was awesome. I like metronome teases, so the drums and the dripping water parts were great for me.

I also love the variety...the different paths. I liked how if you wanted to spend some extra time with a girl you could (I got deep throated by the Latina girl)...or if you just want to get to the goal you can skip the extras. I made it to the four-door finale, but came before I was supposed to, so I look forward to trying again to beat this tease.

I also loved the Cock Hero vids and found those quite a while ago. Were you the one who made those? They're great too. :)

[janmb]

A really great tease!

I must admit I have low expectations to anything not produced by Rits/Nez these days, but this was a really nice breath of fresh air - unexpected but very welcome

[hhhobo]

If you want to add some pain, try looking all the models in the eye as you stroke. If you peek at their charms, you have to smack yourself in the balls until your eyes are back on her eyes.

[ThomasKu]

Great tease! Just wanted to mention that door 4 (back to the past) still doesn't work, when you choose the pool girl. She just offers a blowjob and then nothing happens. An edge button and then a cum button would be nice with a picture of her with cum all over her face at the end would be nice.
Keep on with the good work! Looking forward to new teases of you.

[smartdemon123]

Can you offer a downloadable version of this tease? It won't download properly on the TeaseMe software