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HogtiedCowboy
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scaryfatman
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Spoiler Alert: see/do the teases before reading this.
I liked this set because the girls are so beautifully cruel! However if I could make one plot suggestion, have the twins put the chastity belt on the reader/victim BEFORE revealing their twist ... ideally they should have him actually AGREEING to the idea i.e. taking a 50/50 chance of cum or chastity. I love that idea of the victim having been complicit in his own downfall, and even more if the victim is fooled into it.
But in general, the tease is well plotted, is well written and the photos are good. Also I like the fact that the photos properly match the text. After seeing a few teases where that has not been the case ... I hate to criticise any writer when I have not yet contributed my first tease, but I scratch my head at the ones where the girl (sometimes "your wife/girlfriend") actually manages to mysteriously change identity from one pic to the next.
Martin C
I liked this set because the girls are so beautifully cruel! However if I could make one plot suggestion, have the twins put the chastity belt on the reader/victim BEFORE revealing their twist ... ideally they should have him actually AGREEING to the idea i.e. taking a 50/50 chance of cum or chastity. I love that idea of the victim having been complicit in his own downfall, and even more if the victim is fooled into it.
But in general, the tease is well plotted, is well written and the photos are good. Also I like the fact that the photos properly match the text. After seeing a few teases where that has not been the case ... I hate to criticise any writer when I have not yet contributed my first tease, but I scratch my head at the ones where the girl (sometimes "your wife/girlfriend") actually manages to mysteriously change identity from one pic to the next.
Martin C
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First off, well done tease.
Second off, I happened to notice this line...
"One of us will let you cum at the end of this little ordeal, and one of us will not.", said by Kelly.
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Well, at the end of the tease it is revealed that Kelly was lying, and that neither of them will let you cum. However, if Kelly was the liar and Shelly was the honest one...
When Kelly says, "One of us will let you cum at the end of this little ordeal, and one of us will not." She is giving two statements. The first statement says one of us will let you cum. She is a liar, so that is a lie. Neither of them will let you cum. Then she says that one of us will not let you cum. And since she is a liar, that means one of them will let you cum.
Second off, I happened to notice this line...
"One of us will let you cum at the end of this little ordeal, and one of us will not.", said by Kelly.
*SPOILER ALERT!*
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Well, at the end of the tease it is revealed that Kelly was lying, and that neither of them will let you cum. However, if Kelly was the liar and Shelly was the honest one...
When Kelly says, "One of us will let you cum at the end of this little ordeal, and one of us will not." She is giving two statements. The first statement says one of us will let you cum. She is a liar, so that is a lie. Neither of them will let you cum. Then she says that one of us will not let you cum. And since she is a liar, that means one of them will let you cum.
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