A CHANCE ENCOUNTER
Re: A CHANCE ENCOUNTER
Princess Rachel is cute and I love schoolgirl uniforms, but you really need to reduce the amount of your text. You can even repeat some of the pictures, if it allows you to reduce the text, and still maintain the story.
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Re: A CHANCE ENCOUNTER
I liked it.
I personally would've added more of a public humiliation. And I would like to see something where Princess Rachel is teasing a girl in the future.
Bill
I personally would've added more of a public humiliation. And I would like to see something where Princess Rachel is teasing a girl in the future.
Bill
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