Challenge: Cumming by Chance

[whacker44]

i dribbled 3 times (copiously ) before i had to give up. Will try again when my backbone firms up . Thank you for a wonderfully humiliating time.

[camel]

Awwww..., poor whacker. If you can't stay that close without going over, then don't get THAT close. Of course, that means you might fail the challenge... but she not-so-secretly enjoys that. She doesn't want your ongoing obedience, she wants to see you struggle. I think giving up would be the 'out' she'd like the least.

There was another who failed, and I suggested a modification that he enjoyed. Given that you failed, and you like humiliation, and your name is 'whacker44', I think Chance would want it of you too.

The next time you try it, whack your balls 4 times for each slide of her friends. They don't have to be hard swats. The effect should be cumulative, not immediate, just to raise the stakes a little more, remind you of your previous... weakness ..., and make it more exciting.

Yeah, I think Chance would get a big kick out of that, whacker44.

[Sunset]

Oh no >_< Chance gave me the hope that I would still have chance to start & finish cumming... BUT! it ended up ruined the VERY moment I thought i had hope! Ugh. >_<;

~Sunset~

[camel]

Oh no >_< Chance gave me the hope that I would still have chance to start & finish cumming... BUT! it ended up ruined the VERY moment I thought i had hope! Ugh. >_<;

~Sunset~

So sorry to hear that!

Next time you try, be prepared for the opposite, too. Sometimes you'll find yourself begging Chance to finish counting.

[Sunset]

Oh no >_< Chance gave me the hope that I would still have chance to start & finish cumming... BUT! it ended up ruined the VERY moment I thought i had hope! Ugh. >_<;

~Sunset~

So sorry to hear that!

Next time you try, be prepared for the opposite, too. Sometimes you'll find yourself begging Chance to finish counting.

Also, you deserve some quality feedback! Here's my honest feedback:

- Very good use of teasey words/statements, however, "action words" like *giggles*/*smirks*/*smiles* etc. could be used more often
- Sometimes, seeing the -same- statement over 20 times could be boring >_> I know that the work involved here could be tedious, but I was just thinking to be honest about the feedback though..
- Good selection of models' photos!
- Good use of random timing in slide/page transition, however, sometimes, I see a whole chunk of text and before i even finish reading half, the page changes... x_x
- Good mix of theme of models' photos. Supposing you are trying to cover a variety of fetishes/interests.
- Good use of random element, in general, so that the tease can be used over and over again. I FAVOURITED it by the way. And you're my FIRST. I never had a favourite webtease until i met yours.

The part I like best about this tease is the way the teasey statements are being said -- even better if more "action words" are used. Usually, for me personally, words turn me on more than pictures. A "playful feel", generally, is my taste

Hope my feedback will come useful for you.

~Sunset~

[camel]

I want more feedback like this!

I'm glad to hear your feedback on action words. Do other people agree with Sunset on this one? I was afraid to overuse them, but I can only guess; I don't know where the right balance is without your feedback. My problem was that I didn't want to use *smiles* over and over again, but wanted random pics and was afraid to use actions that didn't fit random pics and break the spell. Darn, I wish I would have thought more about this at the time, because now that you mention it, I could have added *sways hips*, *bites lip*, *stretches & sighs*, *stares intensely*, *leers*... I could have done tons more! So.... great feedback, I got a new insight from this.

I agree on the random/repetitive thing. That's a drawback. If I had it to do over again, I could have changed the slides so they didn't unset themselves, then have put several "reshuffle" slides in there that were "invisible"... they'd just unset everything and then draw another slide. I had thought of it before but was already happy with the statistics on how long it took Chance to start counting and removing more and more slides from the deck changed that. I could have taken the time offset it, but I wanted to get the tease out the door. That said, sometimes Chance's friends are surprisingly gentle and caring, and then the next person tries the tease and somehow the random gods decide Chance's friends will be relentlessly and repetitively mean. I hadn't expected that, but I love it. Now that I'm done, I'm not sure I'd change it if I had to do it all over again because I'd fear that it could homogenize the tease (each run ends up with x% nice slides, y% cruel ones, etc) and that would hurt the tease's longevity.

The models' photos took longer to find than I thought. I needed a good tone, indoors, staring at you, preferably in the living room (though there are some bed pics I couldn't resist), great face, confident, not too explicit (almost nobody walks in plops down and sticks a toy up their ass in the first minute). I had no idea how many good models photos were outdoor photos! If I ever make another tease with lots of models and the same kind of tone, I'm going to try to get the story to be outside so I have a different selection of pics.

The timing thing was tough. I didn't take the time to customize the timing to the actual messages, they were all the same random range of seconds. I wanted to keep the shortest one frustratingly short in order to give a sense of urgency and chaos to it, but yes, some of the messages are longer than others.

Regarding the mix of models, I kept an eye out different ones but was constrained by needing pics that weren't so specific that some of the messages wouldn't work. For example, I explicitly tried to search for Asian pictures, but failed. I didn't find any Asian pics that were indoor where I liked the face, that weren't too explicit or submissive, where either a message of "gentle strokes" or "smack your balls" would work. Not to say they aren't out there, just that I couldn't find them before I gave up. The whole issue made me rethink race and porn. When I see a black or Asian person in real life, I don't think that a meek black woman or a patient demanding Asian woman is a paradox. At all. In porn, though, I somehow read that into the pics. I strongly suspect it's because it IS in the pics because those are models/pics that people are looking for when they are looking for black or Asian erotic photos. Self-selection. (i.e. I'm not inferring, the pic is implying.) However, this might be a "I'm not crazy, you all are crazy." defense. Thoughts, anyone?


Again, thanks much for your thoughtful feedback, Sunset!

[ThomasKu]

Do other people agree with Sunset on this one?

Yes.

Although my experience was a little different than Sunsets: I played for over an hour without Chance counting down even once. But I got this "5, 4, 3, 2, 1 - just kidding" several times. So I finally gave up, because I couldn't stay near the edge any longer.

[camel]

Do other people agree with Sunset on this one?

Yes.

Although my experience was a little different than Sunsets: I played for over an hour without Chance counting down even once. But I got this "5, 4, 3, 2, 1 - just kidding" several times. So I finally gave up, because I couldn't stay near the edge any longer.

Wow ThomasKu! And you hung with it for an hour!!!!

If you read the feedback thread that I had started, you'll see how the tease works. The chances of the tease running for over an hour are really, really low. Chance must have thought you were really special!

[Sunset]

I want more feedback like this!

I'm glad to hear your feedback on action words. Do other people agree with Sunset on this one? I was afraid to overuse them, but I can only guess; I don't know where the right balance is without your feedback. My problem was that I didn't want to use *smiles* over and over again, but wanted random pics and was afraid to use actions that didn't fit random pics and break the spell. Darn, I wish I would have thought more about this at the time, because now that you mention it, I could have added *sways hips*, *bites lip*, *stretches & sighs*, *stares intensely*, *leers*... I could have done tons more! So.... great feedback, I got a new insight from this.

I agree on the random/repetitive thing. That's a drawback. If I had it to do over again, I could have changed the slides so they didn't unset themselves, then have put several "reshuffle" slides in there that were "invisible"... they'd just unset everything and then draw another slide. I had thought of it before but was already happy with the statistics on how long it took Chance to start counting and removing more and more slides from the deck changed that. I could have taken the time offset it, but I wanted to get the tease out the door. That said, sometimes Chance's friends are surprisingly gentle and caring, and then the next person tries the tease and somehow the random gods decide Chance's friends will be relentlessly and repetitively mean. I hadn't expected that, but I love it. Now that I'm done, I'm not sure I'd change it if I had to do it all over again because I'd fear that it could homogenize the tease (each run ends up with x% nice slides, y% cruel ones, etc) and that would hurt the tease's longevity.

The models' photos took longer to find than I thought. I needed a good tone, indoors, staring at you, preferably in the living room (though there are some bed pics I couldn't resist), great face, confident, not too explicit (almost nobody walks in plops down and sticks a toy up their ass in the first minute). I had no idea how many good models photos were outdoor photos! If I ever make another tease with lots of models and the same kind of tone, I'm going to try to get the story to be outside so I have a different selection of pics.

The timing thing was tough. I didn't take the time to customize the timing to the actual messages, they were all the same random range of seconds. I wanted to keep the shortest one frustratingly short in order to give a sense of urgency and chaos to it, but yes, some of the messages are longer than others.

Regarding the mix of models, I kept an eye out different ones but was constrained by needing pics that weren't so specific that some of the messages wouldn't work. For example, I explicitly tried to search for Asian pictures, but failed. I didn't find any Asian pics that were indoor where I liked the face, that weren't too explicit or submissive, where either a message of "gentle strokes" or "smack your balls" would work. Not to say they aren't out there, just that I couldn't find them before I gave up. The whole issue made me rethink race and porn. When I see a black or Asian person in real life, I don't think that a meek black woman or a patient demanding Asian woman is a paradox. At all. In porn, though, I somehow read that into the pics. I strongly suspect it's because it IS in the pics because those are models/pics that people are looking for when they are looking for black or Asian erotic photos. Self-selection. (i.e. I'm not inferring, the pic is implying.) However, this might be a "I'm not crazy, you all are crazy." defense. Thoughts, anyone?


Again, thanks much for your thoughtful feedback, Sunset!

I tried replying to this particular reply.. While I was at work using my blackberry (as there is no internet-enabled PC at work), and ALL the attempts (and re-attempts) at typing my (long winded) reply were gone thanks to my blackberry having its limitations.. So I literally forgot what I wrote (many times) as reply at work..

Anyways, the -key- thing i wanted to say was: having a mix of asian pictures will be a plus. I am asian (from singapore), which is why i could relate to asian-themed pictures better.. Personally, I use sggirls.com for the pictures. You might want to give it a go.

P.S. Apologies that this reply isn't comprehensive.. Did this reply in a rush using my home PC. "Thanks" to my blackberry which frustrated me so many times to the extent I forgot my other key points..

P.P.S. In return, please DO ask me for ANY feedback. I'd be happy to give it! I'd be careful to surf milovana only on my home PC though (: As it is probably smarter than smart phones..

~Sunset~

[whacker44]

Took your advice to heart Camel. Alas, when the lovely Chance did her count down.(rather quickly i thought ).i was way to far off...another failure !!