Playful wife

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Fri Aug 03, 2007 11:40 am

feedback peeps? hope you enjoy

i know i did

TomTheOne · Post by **TomTheOne** » Fri Aug 03, 2007 9:08 pm

I so want to be the guy who gets kicked in the balls by her.

prisoner4612 · Post by **prisoner4612** » Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:21 pm

so wish she was my wife and i knew were TomTheOne lived.

joeliwan · Post by **joeliwan** » Sat Aug 04, 2007 8:33 am

Great, great tease! I thought the model was awesome, the pacing was good. The playful tone is always such a turn-on for me, and you stayed pretty consistent with that throughout.

However, there were a few spelling/syntax problems that I noted. I hope you'll get around to fixing those soon. (Maybe I've just got to be patient and wait a couple days after you publish your next tease.)

But despite that issue, the tease earned a 5 from me! I must echo Prisoner's remark.

-joeliwan

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Sat Aug 04, 2007 10:15 am

aye i know, i have a problem with not being bothered with editing lol, like with my last one, i can't edit that one due to it being in the totm, but i will get round to it as i always do.

thanks btw all

Shaft8888 · Post by **Shaft8888** » Sun Aug 05, 2007 7:33 pm

awesome tease, and gotta agree with tom

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