Feedback: Broken Heart Therapy

[bondageslave36]

I just got done writing this tease. It is my first flash tease and I *think* I did everything properly. Let me know if there are any problems with the tease.

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=7756

Please, leave feedback here. I am always open to suggestions and critiques. Even if you merely enjoyed it and wanted to say thanks, reply here and let me know.

I appreciate it!

[BoredOMK17]

Didn't do it fully but it seems like a pretty twisted, amazing idea.

[bondageslave36]

Didn't do it fully but it seems like a pretty twisted, amazing idea.

Thanks Bored. Yea, it is a pretty twisted tease with what I think is a unique concept. May I ask if you were just browsing, or actually following through with the tease. If so, how far you were able to get and what made you stop? Just curious.

Depending on how lazy I get and if I get some positive feedback from this one, I plan on expanding it to possibly make things a little more twisted and humiliating. Not quite sure, but I sure am open to opinions on that or recommendations.

[lil_sissy4]

I like the concept and the writing, but I think the pacing was a little too slow. It could have gone faster. Still, thanks for the creative tease!

[Evals]

Bad timers can really ruin a tease... Did you test the tease yourself? Maybe it's just me, but it's really hard to look same image and short bit of text for two or more minutes, and not find myself getting somewhat bored. I really liked the concept though, and would've liked to gotten through to reading or doing all of it if I had the patience.

[uberbear01]

Normally I'm not one for overly long screens, but I actually thought the pacing was perfect. I loved that the length of each panel *forces* you to really dwell on what you're actually saying, and for me, I found myself saying the required sentence for a bit, but then, the impact of what I was saying hit home more. If the panel had of changed before that, I wouldn't have gotten that humiliation buzz type thing. Just my humble opinion!

Spoilery type thing:
As for how I played it, I managed to be good and follow the instructions right up to the end, but I hadn't cried at all, even though what I said *had* hit home. So I said "no" and it took me back to the start and I couldn't hold back lol

Excellent tease, possibly one of my all time favourites, and as someone who is quite picky, that's saying something! Bondageslave36 - thank you for your hard work on this! :)

[Tomboy1]

uberbear wrote it:

"Excellent tease, possibly one of my all time favourites, and as someone who is quite picky, that's saying something! Bondageslave36 - thank you for your hard work on this! :) "

THAT´s all I wanna say to this REALLY GREAT IDEA !!!

(by the way... it works ! I cried and I felt so fucking humiliated. That was so great !
What a cockpumping, heartpumping experience.)

THANK YOU VERY MUCH AND PLEASE : More from this...

(sorry for my bad english)

[bondageslave36]

Thanks for the comments! They are appreciated.

I like the concept and the writing, but I think the pacing was a little too slow. It could have gone faster. Still, thanks for the creative tease!

Bad timers can really ruin a tease... Did you test the tease yourself? Maybe it's just me, but it's really hard to look same image and short bit of text for two or more minutes, and not find myself getting somewhat bored. I really liked the concept though, and would've liked to gotten through to reading or doing all of it if I had the patience.

I agree with you on the pacing, especially since I hate having the mystery timer up on the screen myself... I need the page to change from time to time and it kind of takes me out of the tease. Then again, the comments below yours hit the nail right on the head with what my plan with that slow pace was. If you are supposed to be concentrating on or repeating something, I didn't want the pictures constantly changing distracting you from that. PARTIAL SPOILER: I can assure you that most of the timers are between 2 or 3 minutes. I think there is only one that is 5 minutes, but you only get to that one if you have to repeat the tease. The entire tease should be able to be completed in under 45 minutes.

Normally I'm not one for overly long screens, but I actually thought the pacing was perfect. I loved that the length of each panel *forces* you to really dwell on what you're actually saying, and for me, I found myself saying the required sentence for a bit, but then, the impact of what I was saying hit home more. If the panel had of changed before that, I wouldn't have gotten that humiliation buzz type thing. Just my humble opinion!

Spoilery type thing:
As for how I played it, I managed to be good and follow the instructions right up to the end, but I hadn't cried at all, even though what I said *had* hit home. So I said "no" and it took me back to the start and I couldn't hold back lol

Excellent tease, possibly one of my all time favourites, and as someone who is quite picky, that's saying something! Bondageslave36 - thank you for your hard work on this! :)

That was my point with the long instructions and mystery timers... it forces you to really dwell on what you are saying and allow what you are saying to really kick in. That was EXACTLY my goal and I honestly didn't think I was going to achieve that. So, that comment meant a lot. I am glad it worked.

POSSIBLE SPOILER: Yea, I wasn't quite sure about sending the person back to the beginning of the tease because some people might never cry. I was going to give them the choice of not cumming and leaving or repeating the tease again until they did cry, but I didn't want to make it seem like they had a choice... I wanted to give that feeling to them that they were stuck and make them think, "oh crap, I better not hold my tears back this time or else I am going to have to do this all over again!" Then again, I guess you can only keep yourself from cumming for so long. I also thought about adding an "I had an orgasm" button to each stroking page of the tease, but I was really trying to keep it simple and couldn't come up with decision on where I would go from there.

Thanks for the comment!

uberbear wrote it:

"Excellent tease, possibly one of my all time favourites, and as someone who is quite picky, that's saying something! Bondageslave36 - thank you for your hard work on this! :) "

THAT´s all I wanna say to this REALLY GREAT IDEA !!!

(by the way... it works ! I cried and I felt so fucking humiliated. That was so great !
What a cockpumping, heartpumping experience.)

THANK YOU VERY MUCH AND PLEASE : More from this...

(sorry for my bad english)

Wow, one of your all time favorites. That is saying something. Thanks a lot!

Just out of curiosity... how long did it take you to cry? Was it on your first time around? What were you doing/repeating when you finally broke down? Were you trying to hold back your tears, or did it just kind of happen? Did it turn you on? Were you able to last until the end of the tease?

By the way, your English is fine!

[subminpgh]

Should have had something like, made us cum to a pic of her. That would have been really humiliating.

[kassoit]

Should have had something like, made us cum to a pic of her. That would have been really humiliating.

I second that!!!


Dude, I litterally create this account to exprese my devotion to your superb tease!

I was shattered by the image of him fucking her (I recently broke up) and my perversion and seuxual frustration grown up to the max!!!!!

bob

[subminpgh]

I'm glad that I was not the only one to think that way. BTW love the tease. We need more like this

[bondageslave36]

Should have had something like, made us cum to a pic of her. That would have been really humiliating.

I had to save some ideas for the sequel... That is only one of my many ideas... so, maybe it will happy, but maybe it won't.

Should have had something like, made us cum to a pic of her. That would have been really humiliating.

I second that!!!


Dude, I litterally create this account to exprese my devotion to your superb tease!

I was shattered by the image of him fucking her (I recently broke up) and my perversion and seuxual frustration grown up to the max!!!!!

bob

Thanks for creating the account to thank me... it means a lot.

So, you ended up breaking down and crying thinking about him fucking her? How long did that take? Was it on your first time through the tease? You didn't stop jerking off as you cried, did you? Oh, and how nice of you to use the word "shattered." That sure sounds like something your therapist made you say. It looks like that tease had a bit of a deeper impact on you than you had intended.

I'm glad that I was not the only one to think that way. BTW love the tease. We need more like this

Thanks a lot. If compliments keep flooding in like that, I will be forced into doing another one. How far did you make it through the tease? Did you finish it? How long did it take for the tease to break you? What were you saying/doing when it happened?

[subminpgh]

I had too do it two times, i really never cryed, but i was very very upset and humiliated, i was hoping it was going to say cum to a pic of her, you need to do another one add that in PLEASE....

[bondageslave36]

I had too do it two times, i really never cryed, but i was very very upset and humiliated, i was hoping it was going to say cum to a pic of her, you need to do another one add that in PLEASE....

That would be a great way to work up with what my final goal is.

My final goal:
Haha, you wish I would tell you that. Guess you'll have to perform the teases and figure it out for yourself.
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[subminpgh]

works for me, it was still very humiliating, and i like to be humiliated