Along comes a Goddess

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Thu Jul 26, 2007 12:34 pm

Well a new tease, I thought that it was crap lol but any way hopefully someone will like it.

I know there are spelling mistakes but if you can get over that for a day or two ill get round to editing it.

Any way enjoy

oh and i just thought i'd mention i'm currently making one that someone requested so look out for that in the near future.

joeliwan · Post by **joeliwan** » Fri Jul 27, 2007 8:06 am

Wow!

That was really great! Seriously, that tease worked for me. I like a little pain, but not too much, so that element was spot on. And it was a creative presentation of a relatively typical fantasy. Definitely got a 5 from me.

Man, you seem to be firing on all cylinders! Keep up the great work.

-joeliwan

joeliwan · Post by **joeliwan** » Fri Jul 27, 2007 8:10 am

Oh, nearly forgot. Yes, the spelling mistakes were a bit annoying. I'm glad to hear you plan on editing those out soon. But seriously, after a few pages the occasional mistake barely registered with me.

Funny how those higher brain functions tend to slip once in a while.

-joeliwan

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Fri Jul 27, 2007 11:48 am

hey thanks lol, Not to sound to egocentric but i think i could of done much better