Feedback- A Little Treat Flashtease

[AngelAnna837]

My second tease, much longer and more story based than my first on and i would love to know what everyone thinks :D

[Incubo]

You've got a "loop" in there though.....check your page links.
Right at, "Get as close as you can..."

Other than that.....good work.

[jmexico]

hi, beautiful girl, but i felt you held each individual image just too long.

[IndiNyle]

You've got a "loop" in there though.....check your page links.
Right at, "Get as close as you can..."

Other than that.....good work.

Eeek... I'm stuck in the loop.. hope Anna will save me

Enjoying it so far.. Annette is one of my favourites :)

[Evals]

Maybe consider using shorter timers... A lot of teases are frustrating because they force you to stare at the same picture and blurb of text for three minutes. I don't think authors try their teases themselves very often.

[wonderbo]

I agree, the timers were too long. The model is gorgeous though...and well written to the point where I got tired of waiting for each page to advance.

[jimbean485]

Wow, someone is becoming quite prolific Again, I didn't 'do' the tease, but I watched it through to give you some feedback (b/c obviously *my* viewpoint is so incredibly valuable ).

You know, you really have a gift for writing, Anna; you make quite the teasy seductress when you put your mind to it *Very* hot stuff. Oh, and much improved on the spelling! (I only noticed a few punctuation issues an stuff ) I know it's a nitpicky, tiny detail, but I think it's important. Good work.

As for the timers: for the first one (where you're told to get undressed), you might put a button that says "Ready" instead of the timer, though I don't think 2min is overlong for that segment. The thing I really liked about your timers was that almost the entire tease was hands-free, which is helpful for, well, um . . . 'enjoying' it Personally, I would have enjoyed the tease more if the timers were a bit shorter in the beginning. The pictures and text would lend themselves to a little faster flow, though I love how you drew out the part before the touching; maybe you could just put some more pictures in there (w/o text) to fill in the time? Just a thought.

If you purposely looped it right when she says, "Get as close as you can for me baby!" that is DIABOLICAL, Anna! And there's no timer on that page! Genius! Evil genius!

Overall I thought the length was good (and I don't mean that in the way girls do when they mean "too short" ).

Again, great stuff. If you aren't careful, you're going to win TOTM pretty soon! On a scale of 1 to 5, I'd have to rate this tease a

Thanks for sharing, Anna.

Cheers,
Jim

[AngelAnna837]

Ok :D

I have fixed the loop problem lol

[Davis99]

I don't usually like flashteases because they tend to simply delay everything with no real reason. But I loved this one as the pauses were just right. I loved the change from the pool to the bedroom and how she became more dominant.

I didn't cum without using my hands though. All I seemed to be able to do was torment my cock by rubbing it against a chair cushion which only made it hurt, not get off. I can't wait to take you out to dinner Miss.

[AngelAnna837]

*slaps you upside the head*

You know how when you walk out of a crowded movie theater, and there's a line of people waiting to get into the feature ... You're not supposed to shout out the end of the movie!

*taps Indigo on the shoulder* emm... i asked them to post how the did (or didn;t) do it.... sorry....

[slave alexander]

haha well i got stuck in the loop earlier im afraid ! and after about 30mins of edging used up my last point for the week ! :(

Great tease tho Miss Anna keep up the good work !

ps do you think you could write me a note for Miss Jay to explain this, and then maybe i might be able to get my last cum point back !?

Sorry this shouldnt be all about me haha errm anyways like i said keep them cumming so to speak !

[AngelAnna837]

*shifty eyes*

when...did...i....say...that

[jimbean485]

You bastard!

I can't believe you deleted my post! But then again, I can.

*hangs head in shame*

I almost said that "Two can play at that game . . . " little did I know that you were a moderator out here in the threads, too. Nice work, you dog

Cheers,
Jim

P.S. Is my post gone forever, or can you restore it? It was kinda funny, right?

[AngelAnna837]

Awww, i want to see what Jim Said! :P

Indy stop messing with my theard :P

[jimbean485]

Well, thank you for the kind words *bows*, even if you won't let anyone else enjoy my humor (I came to Alex's defense, I gave Anna a nice quote . . . I called Indy a crossdresser ... damn).

Not sure how far this prank game can go when one is battling a moderator . . . unless I enlist another moderator, hm . . .

Cheers,
Jim

P.S. Listen to the lovely lady, Indy