10 Question - my first tease :D- feedback

[AngelAnna837]

Hello :)

i just posted my first tease and i would love to know what people think about it!

please feel free to be critical, i do want to leanr how to get better :)

Anna X

[green]

Well done, Anna :).

Maybe fix the spelling mistakes ;). But other than that i thought it was good. A little short maybe. But its your first tease. As improvement, you could have a list of toys that are required for the tease beforehand(maybe not required in this tease but may be in longer teases).

I hope that you'll continue writing :).

Oh and i got that last question right : D, but failed on alot of other questions : X...

-green-

[MistressD]

I liked the concept a lot. Some interaction with a reward/punishment system.

I found myself getting questions wrong because I wanted to see what sorts of naughty punishments innocent little Anna would have thought up for the boys!

Very nice for a first try - you're one ahead of me new!

Miss D

[ThomasKu]

Very nice. Liked the idea and the model.
But for me it started to fast. First question right - first treat already an edge.

[jimbean485]

Wow, Anna, you're getting really good at this! I didn't play along, but I read through the whole thing.

I agree with Miss D, the concept is really great. I, too, was tempted to get the answers wrong to see what other punishments you came up with, but in the end my pride won out (I only missed 2; *Jim gives himself a high-five*)

Academically, you did a great job of picking a variety of questions and providing tricky answers. I loved the timer to prevent googling! Nice! That question for the orgasm was wicked.

I thought the pictures flowed nicely; they supported the text pretty well. I also thought the pacing was pretty good, though it might make it even more intense if you gave a little bit more teasy encouragement for the edges you ask for. Just a thought.

For me personally, the spelling is a bit distracting (especially in the initial description; if I didn't know it was yours, I probably wouldn't have tried it, tbh). It's mostly good throughout, so that's good. If you want some help I'd be happy to edit for you

Overall I'd give it very high marks. Can't wait to see what you come up with next. Keep up the great work, Anna

Cheers,
Jim

P.S. Hey, look at me! 100th post! I think I spend too much time here

[AngelAnna837]

thank jim :D

yeah i know my spelling is a bit of an issue, i will just need to get myself a proof readed *giggles*

but besides that i am glad you liked it :)

[Little Miss Jay]

Well done on your first flash tease Anna.

I find flash teases a bit tricky to make and usually get Dan to help me with it! Great effort and I hope you make more in the future!

If you need a proof reader, you know where I am.

Little Miss Jay x

Hey, look at me! 100th post! I think I spend too much time here

Hmmm... I'm thinking the same thing about me!

[hhhobo]

I really like teases like this. I'm always torn between trying to get the answer right and deliberately missing it. Here's some detailed feedback. I hope you understand that your work really turned me on and I'm trying to be helpful. #1 was very easy. If you were trying to make it easy and lead the user on, you succeeded. I would rather have seen it a little more challenging. On #2 the answers should have all been between the Civil War (1865) and 1900. Most people can put Garfield in that range. #3 was good. It might have been a little harder. #4 was the multiplication problem. All the answers should have ended in '1', since the right answer has to. #5-#7 were all right on. On #8 the answers shouls all have been close to 240,000. Many people know the earth-moon distance to be in that range. #9 was great. I loved the question mark timer. You might have done that more oftern, with one of them so short as to be almost impossible to get the answer in on time. #10 was great. It's just pure luck to get it right. I wouldn't minded if it had been 20 questions with crazy penalties for misses. GREAT START! i hope you'll do many more teases like this one.

HHHobo

[ballsfull]

Hi Anna;
Really liked the tease... Great job!!

The only comment I would make is to make the questions EASIER....

Ummmm, I hate to be the "dumb one" in the crowd, but I guess I am...

But I'm going to plead that in my case the blood was flowing to the wrong head...
I'm ~sure~ that was the case.... Brain was in lock-up...

Other than that, (okay, spelling too, but that's been mentioned enough - sorry) I enjoyed it...

Very nice...

Barry

[AngelAnna837]

lol! ones says make it harder, ones says make it easier :p

[justans18]

I must say Anna, for your first tease I was very impressed. I have a suggestion for your next tease though, maybe you can try making one that has to do with domination, or cum eating, teaching guys how to eat their cum, make us crave it more and more. I sort of have a fear of eating my own cum, I chicken out whenever I get close to cumming, , so maybe u can make a tease that teaches guys how to luv it, and swallow every drop every time we jack off, ( but only if that's what u want to do of course), or maybe use a more playful tease next time, just lot's of edging, teasing, maybe using metronome, their are alot of different teases u can make from the ideas I have given u. U don't have to listen to me, but just as everyone else on here, just take it into consideration, these r just things that I know that u can do, and do well. U have an amazing talent Anna, , keep up the good work.

[jimbean485]

I second Indy's sentiment, Anna. If you do what gets you going, it really shows through.

Cheers,
Jim

[Nwah]

I knew my obsession with pi in the 7th grade would come in handy!

[Jobicek]

I think most annoying thing were imperial units. Converting from meters per second to miles per hour just in my head proved to be most difficult. So I would like to ask you to include internationally recognized SI units in questions like this - preferably only basic ones in scientific notation.

PS: I have returned to that question later with calculator and I believe that you have wrong answer there. The speed is 465.1 meters per second which is 1040.4 miles per hour. Some believe that the speed is 1037.6 miles per hour but that is a sidereal hour. When you convert from sidereal hour using the number of sidereal days in a mean solar day you get my original 1040.4. It's just elementary school's physics.

[slave alexander]

I thought it was great especially for your first attempt Anna & there were only a couple of spelling opsies no big deal i would like it to go on longer though if anything good work anyway