A long........ Tease

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Wed Jun 20, 2007 2:00 pm

Well that's the title, it was long not as long as submatts though lol, but it is long.

there is bound to be spelling mistakes but i will check them tomorrow, so if you want a tease very polished then wait till tomoz.

other wise, comments suggestions? the usual

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Wed Jun 20, 2007 2:25 pm

ya i did, im just going through and editing it, so if you click back and the page has changed you know why lol

i love making sequels because its great to expand on a storyline so that's planned. this one has been in the pipeline for a while which is why i released it, i think i did about a page or two a day lol.

edit; fuck me editing a tease is boring lol

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Wed Jun 20, 2007 3:00 pm

ok all edited, if any one spots any mistakes PM me.

Helequin · Post by **Helequin** » Thu Jun 21, 2007 4:57 pm

Great tease, I really liked it. I thought it had a nice balance of elements while still having a story to it. I like the end as well.

******Spoiler******

In general I am not crazy about the dilemma ending as the consequences of each choice are only fantasy and not real, removing said dilemma. However, this tease was so good that I was immersed in the story, so much so that I found the end to be quite effective.

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Thu Jun 21, 2007 5:18 pm

glad you liked it, unfortunately you can't please all people all the time and it's the same with teases lol, but i think alot of people like the whole dilemma choice thing even if it is fantasy

i have no idea how I'm going to follow it lol my next one is probably going to be crap lol.

sissypatseybelle · Post by **sissypatseybelle** » Thu Jun 21, 2007 10:40 pm

WOW! She could tease me to the end of time! What a look she gives as you sink to your knees in front of her beauty and dominance! Great inner conflict as the cuckold who desperately wishes to give her pleasure, but can only give that pleasure through a bigger and better provider. Great humiliation having to watch as his size does matter; at least his size does matter to her! Even greater humiliation having her taunts ring true, she loves to torment the cuck and the cuck loves to be tormented! But best or worst of all, might be the choice of having to clean her perfect pleasure palace, up only to discover the game continues and the cum might be warm? Thanks for that tease!

nomeuno · Post by **nomeuno** » Fri Jun 22, 2007 3:23 am

That Tease was STUPID! That was so fuckin STUPID SICK HOT!

scaryfatman · Post by **scaryfatman** » Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:17 am

This tease was absolutly amazing, i read through it and i feel that its amazing..

however i would choose not to cum in the end, and it kinda only gave me one choice.

i guess im into denial

alpahde5 · Post by **alpahde5** » Fri Jun 22, 2007 10:41 am

sissypatseybelle wrote:WOW! She could tease me to the end of time! What a look she gives as you sink to your knees in front of her beauty and dominance! Great inner conflict as the cuckold who desperately wishes to give her pleasure, but can only give that pleasure through a bigger and better provider. Great humiliation having to watch as his size does matter; at least his size does matter to her! Even greater humiliation having her taunts ring true, she loves to torment the cuck and the cuck loves to be tormented! But best or worst of all, might be the choice of having to clean her perfect pleasure palace, up only to discover the game continues and the cum might be warm? Thanks for that tease!

Don't know what tease your talking about lol,

nomeuno wrote:That Tease was STUPID! That was so fuckin STUPID SICK HOT!

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