Please don't expect me to do something like this on every single set.
I don't. That is fine. I'm happy with whatever feedback I get! 
Usually when doing webteases, even story heavy ones I did in the past didn't typically feature this much text. I appreciate the effort. But to be totally honest, at times (especially in the later parts of the set) it felt very overwhelming and I like I just had to get through it to get to the fun stuff.
I understand. I suspected this might be the case, but, I wasn't sure ...
Nancy looks good, don't get me wrong, yet it sort of didn't clicked the way I wished it would have. I haven't really been edging at all to her.
That is fine! That is why I always tried to make edging optional—just for this scenario. 
I called them "story sections", but ... really ... for most players of this game, they would have just been considered to be "normal sections!"
Yeah, as I mentioned in my PM, single girl sets are always a risk ... I was 80% sure you would really like Nancy, but ... I kept that 20% in mind—which ended up being correct! So, I'm glad I made them all "edging optional" ...
Let me tell you another thing upfront: Since you let the leash pretty loose from the beginning, on some parts of the set I bend the rules a little bit to fit my style and preferences better. Sometimes to my own advantage, sometimes to edge even more. More on that in the fully dissected feedback. Nancy would be proud about the latter I figured, but if the former warrants any consequences I'm happy to take them in another set
That is all TOTALLY fine. Writing this set was a big investment—so I wanted to maximize your enjoyment to make sure it didn't flop! I wanted to give you flexibility. You're still new to the game and figuring things out, so I didn't want to force you into rules and a play style that wasn't working. 
Now that you're gaining more experience in what you like and don't like and better understanding your limits ... NOW the girls have a better capacity to "hold you to your rules" 
... but you played it how I hoped you would! 
Starting the set with Nancy's fiercy and demanding nature felt exciting and I was happy to realise she wanted to get to know me and my whole asexual stig better. I really liked the idea of a lewd fashion show. Ecik's and your set showed me there can be a lot of storytelling and worldbuilding even with just lewd pictures.
Yes! That makes me very happy! 
I was very proud of that intro with Nancy being forceful and setting things up! I thought Ecik's idea of the lewd magazine was WONDERFUL! I had a very similar idea—lewd fashion show—as a story mechanic to serve as an excuse for showing lots of lewd pictures in a row ... As I am sure you noted, most sets on here have become 4 pornpics galleries with flirty JOI text, but ... I wasn't sure how much of that you wanted, so, I decided to make the "body" of the set the "fashion show galleries," but, then, since I like telling stories, I was able to "tell my story" around those —and write Nancy dialogue, because she's my favorite character to write!
I think it would be fine to include a requirement in your rules where half (or something) of the pics in the set are just the sort of "lewd" pics that you like ... Everybody has "stuff that they want," so, if that's what you want, just come out and say it and make it a requirement. People around here are actually quite creative, so ... even though a rule like that would be a design constraint, I think you would be surprised at people's ability to do something interesting while staying within constraints.
On Part 1: You played that PERFECTLY ... Girl #1 has an OF. I think she only has like 5 galleries on pornpics with mostly non-nudes, and I am pretty sure those galleries just work as "free samples" to drive traffic to her OF site ...
I agree with you, sir ... She is DEFINITELY DROP DEAD GORGEOUS! I thought you might like her ... I'll see if I can't find her again ... As Nancy eluded, I just pulled pics out of a giant computer file, and I just so happened to have several of girl 1 and 2 in a row—just enough to make a brief "scene" ...
I'm glad you saved girl #1 for last, and I am ALSO glad you skipped edges for girl #3! I wasn't 100% how much you would like her, but ... for her, I was able to use MULTIPLE photo galleries, and then just pick the "most lewd" pictures from them ...
While making the set for you, I realized that the "traditional" set-making methods wouldn't work for you ... because you DON'T want the entire gallery and text—you just want the sexy "lewd" pictures , which ... most 20 photo galleries only have a couple at best, so ... you can burn through many galleries VERY easily ... It's not impossible. As I did for Milena's section, I just had to string together the best pics from multiple sets to make a "complete scene" ... but ALL of your favorites only had like 12 galleries or fewer on pornpics, so ... at this rate, all of the "best material" of lewd pics will be QUICKLY mined out from that list 
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The other thing is that models VERY QUICKLY disrobe during photo shoots! And you don't want to see a bunch of naked girls—you want to see a bunch of "lewd" girls ... So, what I ended up doing, for Nancy, because *I* wanted "standard length" scenes for her, is that I had to go to sites that offered FULL 80 or 120 pic galleries ... and THEN I was able to find like 30 pics (the first 25% of the gallery), where she still had most of her clothes on ... It ended up being a LOT of extra work, BUT ... THAT was on ME! *I* wanted long "story sections" with Nancy, and her being naked would be a no-go for you, so ... I just put in that extra time (to download and upload to imgbb.com, because the "full gallery" sites don't allow hotlinking ) ... So I made it work, but ... anyway ... if you aren't into long story sections much anyway, then, it's probably fine that they require so much extra work, because most people won't deliver on that anyway! But again, that was on ME, but ... I still think it's good for you to know my process as a set creator, because that can help YOU write rules in such a way that will make it easier for people to write sets for you as well!
Feedback on part 2:
I did not have the best sleep to be honest, but it was way better than other times I denied myself overnight. I woke up pretty early, my head already spinning around how the fashion show would continue.
I'm grinning from ear-to-ear as I read this. 
So far, everything is going to plan 
... You went to bed denied with blue balls ... you're having a fun time. You've bought into the set premise and its engaging and you're excited to see what comes next ... it's PERFECT so far!
This time around I really didn't feel like lubing up, it was kind of already getting a little annoying the day before, so I bend the rules here again and just got to work without it.
That is fine. I just wanted you to maximize enjoyment. Lube or no lube wasn't really a concern or design consideration of mine. I just wanted you to enjoy yourself!
The intro sequence was great for getting hard and ready to edge again, as you intended.
Perfect! Glad to hear my pacing has been "on point" so far. 
Oh, wow ... Katie! Yeah ...
So, a LONG time ago, I was introduced to this website called "the Chive" and they have this "hotness" section that is full of non-nude galleries. It's all amateur, user-submitted photos, BUT, the guys at the chive go through them and curate them into themed galleries that they post. So, from time to time I visit "thechive.com" and go through their galleries, and so the lovely Kaite (I didn't even know her name, lol ) caught my eye, and ... I probably have a dozen or two of her pics scattered throughout various corners of my hard drive! Glad you liked her!
Still not having edged today since the pictures didn't hit my triggers (atleast I hope I didn't miss anything?)
No, that's probably correct ...
I didn't really pay too much attention to your exact rules and counting out edge triggers. Unfortunately, as Nancy astutely pointed out, I just decided to "ramp up" the lewd fashion show with "various states of female undress" ... so ... the edges weren't really evenly distributed 
... I'm getting the feeling that THAT is where the major "a lot' problem comes in later—the poor pacing of edges ... Probably, I should have chosen more normal categories where I could have distributed the edges more evenly, but ... I guess I'll keep reading on and see what happens 
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Like, is a regular tight shirt with nipples poking through actually considered see through? Or is a girl showing me the slightest hint of underboob considered as visible boobs?
Well, I foresaw this, which is why I explicitly put in the "optional edging" rules ... or wait. I didn't put those in until later! 
You can always put in your rules your right to edge for extreme hotties. A lot of guys put in rules like they edge for 10/10 pictures and hold the edge for 11/10 pictures. Helequin had some rules like that ... probably your rule set would benefit from something like that—because even though we have the lewd guidelines, it's hard to judge what you deem 11/10 versus what *I* deem 11/10 ...
This chick:
Yeah ... no clue! She was a random submission on "the chive." So, they have their insta links and OF links and other socials linked underneath the pic, but ... I just saved the picture, so ... no clue!
Meeting Lily was a nice sort of cool-off segment and I was happy to take another small break after this. She's cute aswell, but nothing that tickled my fance too much.
Fair enough.
Yeah, I thought a LOT about pacing when I crafted the set, so ... I tried to put in some of these "cool down" scenes after the heavy action sections ... and *I* really like Guerlain (Lily) and thought you might as well ... and since Nancy was getting so much screen time, I thought that I would include a few other models—and just try to pad out the story and feeling of being the "stage manager" at the lewd fashion show!
Since I knew there would be denial until the end of all parts I actually planned accordingly and wanted to run some errands and clean the appartment in the breaks. So I did that and maybe 3-4 hours later came back to part 3!
Nice!
Playing the part 3 intro was the first real time Nancy kind of got to me and I felt like she was a lot hotter than before
I don't know why, but she looked particularly leggy in these photos.
Hahahaha ... that's great!
So, one thing to keep in mind is that most of these models start at 18, and their bodies are CONSTANTLY changing. What they look like at 18, two years later at 20, they look different ... and then different at 22 and 24—and some even continue into their 30s ...
The first couple photo galleries, I know the one was marked as "teen", so ... Nancy was pretty young, but ... this one was probably done when she was in her mid 20s ... ALSO, there is a big difference in how Nancy does her makeup. Sometimes, she does the "smoky eye" look (which I LOVE ), but here, it's just more "normal", softer-looking makeup (which I ALSO love! ) ... She's still very skinny and slender, but ... she's NOT 18 here—so she's "filled out" a little bit more, so ... THAT is probably why she appears "more leggy" ... but ALSO she probably has a better photographer, and she's NOT 18 and at the time of THIS shoot has been in the business for YEARS, so ... she is MUCH BETTER at posing and taking photos ... so ... between her being "leggy" (and also the way her shirt selectively covers up her boobs sometimes and sometimes not ) I'm not surprised that she "got to you more" 
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The OTHER thing that I have noticed is that the more I see and "get to know" a model, the more I like her ... For example, Ecik's favorite model is Angela White—who's thicc with big boobs and some might even consider "plus-sized" ... NOT a typical "Fatts Girl." HOWEVER ... Ecik has included her in enough sets for me (usually just single scenes here and there), that I have actually come to like her quite a bit. STILL not my favorite, but ... her personality and the way he writes her (and the way that *I* have written her for Ecik as well ) I have actually REQUESTED she be featured in sets for me that HE writes—don't go including her in sets that YOU write for me! I just know *HE* enjoys writing her, and yeah—she's pretty. NOT really my type, but ... the personality of her character I enjoy and gets me aroused, so ... it's possible this is a factor for you, but ... idk. Maybe not. Maybe Nancy just looks FUCKING GOOD! And I spent a LOT of time going through MANY "Nancy Ace galleries" trying to find the PERFECT ones, so ... ...
Incorporating an interactive task like me scrolling through specific pictures was a genious idea. That's just the right amount of action or gamification I usually need to keep sticking to things.
Yeah, I thought it would be good for you ... and that is also why I wanted to put the task in the context of a larger story so that it would have more meaning and context than simply stroking on your own through a random gallery ...
I have to admit though after a while, it was here where I bend the rules a third time and stopped stroking for pictures. Knowing this was a mere endless supply of pictures I simply scrolled through the pictures and edged accordingly to my rules to pictures I found edge-worthy in the first place.
And that is fine. And this was another area where I could "cut some corners." *I* don't have to search for the pictures (which takes time), and, since you're so selective and the gallery is generally higher quality, then, it's left to you to decide. You played it pretty much exactly as I intended, then.
On some I even held edges without it being necessary. But more on that in my return set, since I saved every last picture to include it just as you recommended.
AHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAA!!!! Oh MAN!
Oh, boy ... now *I'm* getting nervous ... Whelp ... I asked for it! You have good taste, Cake, so ... I am looking forward to it!
I also know set construction takes a lot of time, so ... I was ALSO trying to save you some time, but ... ALSO give you some ideas for the return set, so ... yeah.
... but now I'm getting nervous—which is good! It'll be heaven—I'm sure ...
As per the rules of the WtSSTaDaMiT task, I opted for 20 edges before starting.
Oh, man! 
I'll admit, this might have been a little ballsy (no pun intended) after what I've already been through and especially not knowing what is to come after the task
No kidding!
but I was hella horny and it felt right.
Well, once again, I wanted to leave things up to you—since I was unsure of your limits. Yeah, I thought you would go conservative and safe with something like 5 or maybe 10 ... 20 was DEFINITELY ballsy and I'm sure your judgment was impaired by the horniness, but ... I mean—well ... isn't that a part of the fun! 
In the end I even managed to crank out some extra edges once again, going above 20. This endless scrolling hit right home, with some sort of a "there could be the best picture I've ever seen just around the corner"-feeling. So I just kept going.
I love it!
EVERY subreddit can be viewed through Scrolller.com. This is SUPER easy to include in sets and requires VERY little effort ... just finding a FIRE gallery that will work for you will be the only trick. And I already know of a number of galleries you might be interested in ...
The one thing, though, is if the gallery is young or not very old, if you scroll long enough, images will start repeating, so ... sometimes that's an issue ... It's "infinite scrolling" until it's not!
But, yeah ... scrolller galleries can even be found for particular porn models as well. I don't use it every set, but, I keep it in my "bad of tricks" when writing sets and bust it out every now and again ... SO GLAD that it worked so well for you!
Yeah, she's a beauty:
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Another "Chiver" I am sure ... though, one downside about "the Chive" is that they downgrade their picture quality to speed up load times for people on phones, but ... I find the quality generally to be good enough.
These were some of the most agonizing yet awesome edges and holds I've done in a long time. My head was spinning by the end of it, but I loved the inclusion of so many of my favorites at the end.
LOVE to hear it! THAT is what we are about here on the HMCP thread!
And yes ... to "guarantee satisfaction", I just HAD to go through and find the best lingerie photos I could for your favorites to anchor the section. It just wasn't optional for me!
After finishing with this segment I honestly was relieved I had made it to another much needed break point. I was however a little frightened by the announcement of a not so straightforward ending
Yes ... THE TWIST! Sowing fear, excitement, and anticipation—all at the same time! It puts DREAD in the stomach of every tease player, and EACH ONE of us is both delighted AND terrified!
Of course, it either typically goes in one of two ways: amazing or horrible. I've been on the receiving end of both. In my experience, if it goes horrible, just chuck the rules and set as presented and make whatever modifications you need to to salvage the set—BUT ... well ... I overplanned and TRIED to anticipate as much as I could ... VERY curious to see how things went ...
Unlike the last break I wasn't really able to get my head off of things this time not even 1,5h hours later saw myself back at my desk. Hard as can be, throbbing, balls feeling heavy and achy. For the final stretch I did apply lube.
Oh, man ... I LOVE IT! This play by play has been AMAZING to read!
There were quite some nice pictures in here once again, but some (like the pussy close up covered by flowers) I just had to skip unfortunatly. Maybe with this feedback or additional messages we can figure out what works best and what doesn't for the future together.
All fair points. Just skipping is the easiest solution for now ... "lewd" can just be so hard to define! And then trying to make educated guesses on what you might like ... but I'm glad I did alright!
Yeeessssssss ... Anjelica ... aka "Krystal Boyd." She is VERY popular on this site overall with MANY of webteases dedicated to her ... AND she is fairly popular among people who play this game ... AND she has a CRAP TON of galleries, so ... it will be a while before you go through and exhaust the body of her work!
... AND she's Russian, which ... I like them eastern European girls, too ... Yana and Nancy are both Ukrainian, and Anjelica has VERY nice boobies and legs, so ... NO SURPRISE HERE you liked Anjelica!
Ending this segment with my personal favorites though hit home even more. After all that I've been through the last 24 hours these were the best edges in years.
I prospored every moment of it. I could feel my dick getting even harder than I thought was possible - my balls even heavier. I was so eager for a final release!
After finishing with this I went ahead and read through the final segment with Nancy. I know you love this sort of storytelling, but I have to admit for the circumstances it simply was too long for me. As I got further and further I wasn't really paying attention to strokes or rules anymore, just reading through the story, hoping to find an end.
That is TOTALLY FINE and understandable.
This game is supposed to be fun, and I write my sets to be enjoyed, so ... I will ALWAYS say, "Make adjustments and tweak the rules in order to better enjoy the experience." So, I'm fine that you just "read through" that last scene ... I knew going into it that the textless galleries were always going to be the "main event", but I enjoy "stories" and writing Nancy, and even if you weren't going to get a lot of sexual pleasure from the "story scenes," obviously, they were necessary for the story, and THAT seemed to help bring the whole thing into a more cohesive experience, so ... yeah—I'm fine with how it turned out!
I probably mentioned it in a PM or something, but ... the "story sections" with the girls can be tricky ... When they are teasing and being flirty and giving JOI—that's one thing, but ... while some guys might be okay with stroking along with a story, I know many aren't ... and like, the "story sections" I made them more "story" than "porn tease", so ... ESPECIALLY with you being "done" at the finale and ready to release, that was TOTALLY understandable ...
Okay, so ... I need to ask ... How was that final scene with Nancy? Was it okay? A total snorefest? 
Just racing through to get to the end? Did the pictures and dialogue and jerk off instructions do ANYTHING for you? THAT is my REAL question!
So, I sort of figured cumming with Nancy WOULD be the "worst ending" for you ... BUT ... I really WAS trying to tempt you with more denial, and so, since you didn't push yourself for better endings, I am TOTALLY FINE with you getting the "worst" outcome!
Okay ... THAT said ... I REALLY DID try my VERY BEST to write a VERY GOOD "closing"/"finale" scene with Nancy ... on the OUTSIDE CHANCE that you would like it! I did NOT expect you to—as an asexual —BUT ... I considered it to be a non-zero possibility, like ... MAYBE with all of her teasing and the sexy writing and pics and going through this experience—MAYBE some bond or attraction would be formed, or ... maybe your "subby side" would come out and you would be surprised to discover you enjoyed that sort of thing ... did ANY of that happen? Or, was the final scene more like a "chore" you had to get through?
Like I said, I put in a STRONG EFFORT on that final scene. So ... if THAT wasn't able to "do it for you" and get you interested ... MY thinking is that probably that sort of scene just won't happen—LOL! Like ... if MY best writing and efforts can't do it, then ... probably nobody else can do it either, lol , which ... in THAT case ... We probably need to figure out a better "ending format" for you.
Now ... you ALSO said that Nancy wasn't that hot to you ... and ALSO she was stripping and being naked ... and ALSO the scene went on a while, so ... there IS a possibility that if we found a "hotter model" that you found more attractive who was wearing more clothes and posing more "lewdly" and with less or different (non-standard/traditional) JOI ending, like ... I had Nancy give sort of a "standard" ending—sort of as a test to see whether or not "standard endings" would work for you ... and ... while I DO feel bad you didn't get the "best" ending ... in terms of the overall set and wanting to test/push denial ... I have no regrets about THAT part of it! BUT ... yeah ... This was my best "standard"/"typical" ending, so ... if you could elaborate in what ways that it didn't work, and then ... COULD an ending like this work for you IF the model was hotter, the scene was shorter, and the dialogue was more about "lewd" things? What might the ideal "cum scene" be for you? Because THIS was an exemplar for the "standard" full orgasm ending, so ... what modifications would need to be made to alter the "standard ending" to make it WAY BETTER for you?
... or would it be a different ending altogether? Would you just prefer to cum to a favorite pic from the set that you have chosen? Do you even *want* to "end the set" with a girl actively teasing you?
One thing that I only noticed a few days after playing now: No matter how horny I was, how many edges I did or how desperately I wanted to cum - With every new picture that were to come, I always just focussed on the girl and her looks. Never even once did the thought "I want to stick in in her" cross my mind. So I guess that just strenghtened my own believes in my asexuality
Hahahahaha ... that's great!
So, with ALL of Nancy's flirting and character development ... did ANY of that increase your arousal? Is it ONLY about looks for you? Does the text enhance the experience and/or your arousal in any way?
As I mentioned, I tried a LOT of different techniques (while avoiding being directly obscene and just dirty talking about sex acts) ... I'm just curious which, if any, of those helped?
Yeah, I think I mentioned it in a PM, but, Addict's set for you (which I don't believe you played yet), is MUCH more "standard" in his approach with how sets are usually made, so ... I'll be curious to read and find out if any of his attempts were successful ... because he was more direct while I played more around the edges, but ... if he is able to be successful and "get you", I would be VERY curious to see what does or does not work ... You're a mystery and a puzzle to me, Cake! One which I am enjoying trying to figure out and solve!
I hope this lengthy feedback gave you a better understanding of what makes or breaks pictures and scenes for me personally. Looking forward to hitting you back, as I said in a private message I already have a great idea in mind. And I'm of course also looking forward to hopefully many more sets to come!
VERY helpful!
I think the long feedback was appropriate here, because the set WAS the length of 4 or 5 sets, so ... if the feedback is 4-5 times as long, then it's just commensurate to the length of the set you received ... and future sets will NOT be this long! As I explained, it was more of a "one off", and I REALLY got into writing the whole set with Nancy and doing the fashion show and introducing you to the game. I am SO GLAD that it worked out, because I took SEVERAL risks ... and I am VERY GLAD you had such a fun AND memorable experience!
Yeah, each of the 4 parts was a "standard length" set, but ... had you continued—yeah ... There was enough tasks there DEFINITELY to constitute a "fifth" set!
The writing was relatively short for the remaining unplayed parts. Mostly, it was just Nancy "giving instructions." Nothing was as long or invested as the "final scene" that you played ... So, on that note, you played through the "longest" of the endings. BUT ... the tasks that you would have had to complete were WAY longer, and ... the one that actually required effort to gather wanking material for ... THOSE pictures I can use ... in my NEXT set for you!
Other than Anjelica, were there any of my other favorites which stood out to you?
I have a few more thoughts, but ... it's getting late ... I'll probably write them up later once I respond to the PM that you sent me!
I gooned hard to her video.
Stroke to this image for 30 extra seconds
