[Feedback] Goodwood International Reformed Ladies' School 1

[M0nkeyMan]

Hi, all! Longtime player, first-time publisher here.

My first completed tease, "Goodwood International Reformed Ladies' School 1: The job interview", is now live. https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=66642

It should be played in a single session, which will take 4-5 hours.

It's written for men, and contains edging, anal, pain, humiliation, and (private, virtual) CFNM. If you make it through, there's an orgasm reward at the end!

Constructive comments and feedback are very welcome!

-M0nkeyMan

[M0nkeyMan]

Having finally finished work on this, I've got a renewed appreciation for those of you who are creating teases. It's a lot of work! (Especially when one doesn't think everything through properly beforehand, and has to go back and rewrite pretty much from scratch. Twice!)

I have in mind that this will be a series, if it's well received. Hopefully, now I know what I'm doing (at least somewhat), further teases won't take me as long to do...

[manwithcape]

I have taken a peek and like what I've seen so far.
The length of the "chapters" if we'll call it that is chosen well.
The images, models, story, ... all fit together.
The text is written well and the timers seem to be balanced correctly.

You get all the stars!

I look forward to giving it a proper test run.

[bloop12]

Did a quick play-through of a couple of the girls. Planning to do all of it another day when I have more time. Nice variety of tasks, with reasonable difficulty and ramp-up. Good work, definitely a new one for the favorites list.

[M0nkeyMan]

Thanks, folks! Let me know what you think when you've had a go at playing all the way through...

[Gump]

Hey, I really liked your tease, and as you asked for it, would like to give detailed feedback. (So for everyone else reading this, consider it a spoiler.)

The length and difficulty of challenges was well picked, I personally found the blowjob stuff the hardest, I find it kinda unerotic and also hate gagging on stuff. But I guess not liking it, is kinda the point.
I particulary liked the different anal parts, especially the one girl, which leds you thrust the dildo from 0 to 100 fast in your arse was something I haven't seen so far. Also the warmup in it was nice, so it was managable.
I also enjoyed that anal isn't combined with stupid sissy stuff (like "wear panties and makeup") how it is done in a lot of other teases. I get nothing from sissy parts, I rather have an anal-challenge I must endure to achieve something.

Variance: You have some good variance between the girls, but of course there would be a lot of stuff nipple-torture-wise which could be done additionally, hanging a water bottle from tied balls, jerking in specific positions etc.

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED that the tease remembered it, when you are still plugged or have tied balls etc. Even though there wasn't much going on, when you met another girl plugged (they always told me to just take it out), I played far too many teases, where it said "add nippleclamps" and then the author forgot to tell me to take them off at some point. Really hate it, when then occurs.

Things I would like in future teases (this is very personal, what I like, you may consider this while reading).
1. My favorite tease is "Meeting Catie Minx" especially because there is a part, where you have an inflatable buttplug in yourself, have to edge and tease your nipples.
Almost no tease has an inflatable plug in it.
Also all the girls had like "one" topic. You could combine them e.g. someone who stretches your balls while you do anal or similar.

2. Story. I am a sucker for good story and decisions. For example girls who are exceptionally cruel, others who like me but still have to torture me, inbetween fights, perhaps a cellar where I am absolutely not allowed to head downwards, there I find a secret meeting, and they would tell the director about it, if I don't follow their orders etc. (I would definately head down there). I know stuff like this takes ages to write and implement, just letting you know, that I really like storyteases.

3. For me it could also get a bit darker / more slave-dynamic but that's just personal preference.

Thanks for your tease!

[verynicekojak]

Interesting concept. It is rather slow, methodical and you can not skip texts. Only for patient men.
Unfortunatelly after finishing 2 girls, and starting with 3, it moved me to the beginning and asking about my name :(.

[M0nkeyMan]

Interesting concept. It is rather slow, methodical and you can not skip texts. Only for patient men.

True! That was a deliberate choice I made, to heighten immersion.

Unfortunatelly after finishing 2 girls, and starting with 3, it moved me to the beginning and asking about my name :(.

That sucks. But it must have been the web server restarting, or the browser reloading; I don't think that can have had anything to do with the script.

[M0nkeyMan]

Hey, I really liked your tease, and as you asked for it, would like to give detailed feedback.

Thank you!

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED that the tease remembered it, when you are still plugged or have tied balls etc.

I made a real effort to get those details right. Hopefully I did! (Since you can visit the students in any order, there are a lot of possibilities to account for.)

Things I would like in future teases...

Everybody's got different preferences. Given the constraints of the setup I've used for this, there are limits as to what can be included. Specifically, I wanted to use a large number of models in separate sessions, so each one had to be fairly short. (A previous version of this tease took nearly seven hours to play, which was ridiculously long.) But if I do get sequels written, they'll vary a bit in their focus and tone.