The Dark Sex Tantra Goddess Series. Feedback, Bugs, Language Errors. Help me make this series even better.

[MotoMike]

I look forward to further chapters. Is the content planned to be very different from the non-EOS versions you've previously done; that is, is this more than just a rewrite into EOS?

[SunnyDay]

Your teases are truly awesome.
In the older versions the companion we discover in part 1 only makes an appearance until mid part 2. I hope we may be able to read more about her (and also about that wedding which was announced in part 2 ). And also maybe more practices to reinforce her, as for now we only know about the blue light visualisation.

[gpb9393]

Love your work!

[arnold4breath]

I worship The Dark Sex Tantra Goddess daily!
Thank You for your great work!
Arnold

[sohts]

This tease was so great! I can't wait for the 2nd one.

[Mesh]

Part 6 is amazing, probably your best work yet. I absolutely loved it. Will we get part 7 or are you just going to keep adding materials to part 6?
Also, you hinted that we might get futa, is that really coming?
Thank you for your great work.

[1wholistens]

This is all about task #8. The most beautiful of all the pictures of this task, by far is

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[sissylinda]

GODDESS I NEED YOUR STRICT DISCIPLINE!
I failed to the listening test, of page 22,
since the pornhub link i cannot enter this site with unknown reason, so i just picked up the answer randomly sorry Goddess Tantara

[Amorcita]

My beloved Goddess, with this body of you I worship you the most.....


160 edges in hidden tease (250+ total)


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Fantastic work as always

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though I think the Goddess has different plans for me for now

There is one "bug" at the end of the tease where there is no button or timer, and a looong pause, and it's not clear whether something got stuck, the tease ended or..

[PlayfulGuy]

My beloved Goddess, with this body of you I worship you the most...

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This will always be my number 1!

Perfection!

And I edged 80 times through the "hidden tease" in Part 1 the Gold Edition.


PG

[gpb9393]

My beloved Goddess, with this body of you I worship you the most

[PlayfulGuy]

Here is my feedback on the new Gold Edition of part 1.

Background
I did Part 1 of this series last year when it was first posted and it was immediately one of my all-time favorite teases. It truly felt like an inspired piece of work! Unfortunately I couldn't continue with the series right away and by the time I was ready to it had disappeared from Milovana so that was that.

I was very happy to see it return, and this week I was able to restart the series, so I began with the recently updated Gold Edition. So please keep in mind

1. That I'm comparing it to the original that I did last year, which I thought was practically perfect.
2. I don't mean to be overly critical and hope it doesn't come across that way, I'm just providing my honest feedback.

I've put my comments in the spoilers below.

Feedback on the hidden tease

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General feedback
I did part 1 on Monday not doing the "hidden tease", then repeated it again on Wednesday doing the hidden tease.
I had a great time and did lots of edges, but by the time I was done it felt to me that adding the hidden tease to part 1 was a mistake. With some slight adjustment it would easily stand on it's own as another lesson in the series, reinforcing that all forms of the goddess should be worshiped, and that you are choosing the one that you want to have appear for you.

Part 1 was pretty well perfect as it was. To me it kind of feels like this was tacked on almost as an after thought, and that it took something that was already complete and perfect and made it a little less rather than more.

Part of the reason I felt that way is that for me the hidden tease has a number of issues.

More specific feedback on the hidden tease:

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First of all the hidden tease is not very well hidden. Literally all I did was answer a question honestly, and surprise, "you've found the hidden tease". It felt like it was too close to the beginning, and too easy to "stumble" on to.

A couple other things lessened the experience for me (and I totally recognize that others would not be bothered by these things).

On page 408 you're at 9 edges, 409 you're at 10 edges, then on page 410 it's suddenly do "as many as you can", breaking the pattern that has been well established by that point, and then on page 411 the pattern resumes with 12 edges. Why? You establish a pattern, then throw it out for one page, then go back to it. To me it makes it feel disjointed.

More annoying to me was page 406. It starts out with a model that would have been my pick. I would love to have her appear to me! But, after 10 or so images it's suddenly "time for a body switch" and it changes to a completely different woman, and I never got the chance to "choose" her.

Again it totally breaks the pattern that had been established (x edges for this form of the goddess), and seems entirely random. For me it was Very annoying, because the first woman would have been my pick.

Page 408 was great fun for me. You had 90 seconds to do 9 edges, so one every 10 seconds. I wouldn't want it any faster than that though.

On the other hand, I LOVED the video segments! Page 409 was 10 edges and a 12 minute video so edging about once a minute was perfect, then 411 was 12 edges and 16 minutes, so again roughly once a minute. I kind of want to make an entire tease based on that idea. Just have to find a bunch of video clips of about the right length....Hmmmm.....

I also have mixed feelings about the final segment where it jumps from 12 to 24 edges. I actually skipped that segment because by that point I was exhausted and couldn't take any more. I think this part could easily end after the 12 edges for the 12th form of the goddess, and then return to the main lesson.

A few general authoring suggestions

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Try not to refer to buttons, or pages, or "this tease" unless it's really necessary.
For example, don't say "then continue to the next page". Just say "then continue".
It's a little thing, but in writing, less is often more. If it can be said in fewer words, it probably should be.

As for referring to "this tease", the tease clearly sets itself up as a course in tease and denial. The goddess is training me, and this is a course, so this is a lesson, or training session, not a tease. Know what I mean? Using different phrases like that increases immersion in the experience.

So far I have only done the first part. I'll be doing part 2 today, but I love what you are doing and think it has the potential to be of the best series on Milovana. I sure hope it develops that way.

Regards,

PG

[PlayfulGuy]

My beloved Goddess, with this body of you I worship you the most...

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This will always be my number 1!

Perfection!

And I edged 80 times through the "hidden tease" in Part 1 the Gold Edition.


PG

Dear Playfulguy, The photo you chose is also my favorite. I found more pictures of her and her name is Anastasia Khamraeva. She is is so beautiful! I will definitely use these photos again for one of my teases. Below some pictures of her. Enjoy!

OMG! Thanks for those! I had "Anastasia Khamraeva (1)" along with a couple others that go with the one I posted, but the others are all new to me. She is stunning!

And I would be happy to test a new tease for you depending on timing. I'm still working through this series, having repeated episodes 1 and 2 a few times each. I'll be doing part 3 for the first time today! Very exciting! I expect it will take me another week or 10 days even to finish the series. I'll share any feedback i have on those too.

That said, I suppose if you had something you wanted me to test in the meantime I would have to assume that it's an assignment from the Goddess and do it

PG

[aksuborbi40]

My beloved Goddess, with this body of you I worship you the most...



And so far Mistress i am at over 250 edges in the Gold version of Your tease.
Thank You for such a wonderful experience.
***curtsey**

I accept the future You have decided for me Mistress.

[lucy91]

GODDESS I NEED YOUR STRICT DISCIPLINE!