20 Edges

[SissyChris76]

Hi all, just finished my first tease! Hope you like it. Please let me have ANY feedback you have. Thanks!

[box_of_cards]

Thank you for your first tease! I have not played it yet seriously, but just tried it out a bit. But I really like it so far! The concept seems nice, I really like that the pictures are starting dressed and slowly get hotter, that is really tease! The beat I found a bit too fast for my taste, I guess after 10 edges i would just always edge after a couple of seconds and thereby rush through the rooms...

[SissyChris76]

Thank you for your first tease! I have not played it yet seriously, but just tried it out a bit. But I really like it so far! The concept seems nice, I really like that the pictures are starting dressed and slowly get hotter, that is really tease! The beat I found a bit too fast for my taste, I guess after 10 edges i would just always edge after a couple of seconds and thereby rush through the rooms...

Thanks for your time Mr Cards, appreciate your insight and kind words. I wanted to make a simple tease to prepare me for a more complex one.

[kerkersklave]

I've played your tease and I like the concept and how you use audio. Teases rarely use voices from videos etc. but it works great.

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One issue was that I just can edge too easily and after the first edge I can edge at extremely slow strokes. After several edge I can get me there with a stroke every 3 seconds in about 10 seconds. I tried to delay my edges to see more of the tease, but it felt like not following the purpose of the tease. It would work better to make it much more hard to edge.
Edge in difficult position, only using one ore two fingers or tapping or rubbing the sweet spot, edge while cooling the penis with ice, edge while holding your breath. Stuff like that. And the rooms should probably contain some regular teasing or edge holding to make them longer. The way it is, I could really just edge on the first page of each room.

I liked that at the ending you could choose denial an be humiliated for it. I usually don't cum for teases even if they tell me to, so it this works much better than ignoring the instruction.

[tkct78]

Great tease & concept all the way thru. As others have noted, the edges will come easier after the first couple of rounds, so you may just need a longer cool down period between rooms.

The warmup room beat & timers were off...giving a lot of pauses after a picture changes.
I defintely think the speed at the end is too fast..it's about 1/s. I think if you had it at 1/s by edge 10, and then you kept going slower it would be more fun/torture, getting down to 1 stroke every 4 or 5s.

Thanks again!!

[box_of_cards]

I really like the suggestion of kerkersklave! maybe you could indeed consider lowering the stimulation after each room. Slower beats, limited stimulation (only shaft)...

[ritewriter]

Fun tease! Great model selection, and I love the voice element.

Typo (Asian mistress, latex dress): "...mixed with the your tears of frustration." "the" is unnecessary.

Sound edit issue: School girls. The last word of the voice here, "Wet" is clipped just before the "T"

Sound edit issue: Room 12 and Room 15: Final dialogue continues past the cut to the next scene.

Overall issue: Playing on my laptop, the timer clock is over the first side button (CAN'T EDGE). No idea how to fix this or if it's a problem across platforms.

Personal thing, ignore obviously if you don't agree, but...

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I'm not a fan of using mainstream actresses in porn captions or teases, since I feel like they aren't willingly doing erotica/porn. I get that that's a turn on for many people, but I avoid teases and captions that use celebrity images if I can. If this were me, I'd find other models to replace Emma Watson and Scarlett Johansson. Also, the Emma Watson images are of a lower quality (blurrier, etc) than most of your other images and using the Scarlett image as the final cum image makes it especially noticeable for me.

Well done!

[SissyChris76]

Hey, WOW, a noob asks for feedback, and he gets positivity, encouragement AND excellent ideas for me to ponder on. I thank you living legends who took time to post here. I did want to get my bearings and do something rather elementary before I crack on with something really special.