Chore day is my first tease, and i was just looking for feedback on what to do different!!! let me know if you enjoyed it!!
Thank you in advance!!!
I do plan on posting more teases, so any ideas on what to do would be great! I enjoyed the Amy's days of denial, so i was tinking something along those lines.
Ladies, id like to do some for you as well, let me know what your into!
chore day
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all2true
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Re: chore day
Well I am always glad to see a new tease writer!
I am not sure I would have put four edges on just one page
I would have used at least 4 pictures, also its nice to work up to edges.
I though the part about buying honey was- well- amusing
I applaud your creativity
did you actually test run tis tease before you posted it?
Thank you for your contribution
rememeber no matter what the feedback
ALWAYS write something YOU like.
This site is enriched by more ideas,
so please don't take my critique to harshly.
I am not sure I would have put four edges on just one page
I would have used at least 4 pictures, also its nice to work up to edges.
I though the part about buying honey was- well- amusing
I applaud your creativity
did you actually test run tis tease before you posted it?
Thank you for your contribution
rememeber no matter what the feedback
ALWAYS write something YOU like.
This site is enriched by more ideas,
so please don't take my critique to harshly.
to thine own self be true
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Re: chore day
yeah the chore tease was great. the pics were good and the fact that you had two mistress' was a good site to see.
nice tease!
nice tease!
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Re: chore day
Thanks for contributing! =)
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cumhardy
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Re: chore day
Hey. Im confused is this tease for guys or girls? You used the 'for-gals' tag which suggests its for women but Im not sure from the first few pages...or maybe its open to both? I didnt read through the whole thing cuz I didnt want to spoil it
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tie4torture
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Re: chore day
The original idea was to keep it open for both sex's. but after i kinda looked it over i noticed it is not really.
And for me "trying the tease myself" I had read it, but had not physically done the tease, i figured it would take too much time and was more conerned with writing it. I would appreiate some help though, if someone could teach me how to do the flash teases, that would be great.
Also, i decided on my course of action. I am going to create a "Friday, Slave Day" series. It will consist of a tease every friday, with seperate objetives for males and females, as well as for people who are going to work or school that day.
Anymore feedback would be great, and the 'friday Slave day" series i hope to start on, ofcourse, friday, but may have to wait an additional week due to some travel plans.
Thank you all for your critisicm!
And for me "trying the tease myself" I had read it, but had not physically done the tease, i figured it would take too much time and was more conerned with writing it. I would appreiate some help though, if someone could teach me how to do the flash teases, that would be great.
Also, i decided on my course of action. I am going to create a "Friday, Slave Day" series. It will consist of a tease every friday, with seperate objetives for males and females, as well as for people who are going to work or school that day.
Anymore feedback would be great, and the 'friday Slave day" series i hope to start on, ofcourse, friday, but may have to wait an additional week due to some travel plans.
Thank you all for your critisicm!