Bokki Tease Club - feedback thread

[Unnamed_007]

Which ending did you get this time then? Can't see who gets what on the poll I'm going to guess 2

Yes, I did get 2. Good guess!

[Benjismith37]

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Awesome tease overall. I got to Tuesday with Code 033 and it ended with the script malfunctioning. Is that a bug or an intentional end? If intentional, no worries... it was great either way but which ending was that? 1, 2 or 3?

[Kristycookie]

I've only just played the first day and I'm very impressed already. I'm trying to play this in 'real time' (one day per day). We'll see how that goes.

I'm also working on my first tease, and I'm feeling more self-conscious about it after seeing how great yours is

[Shattered]

Pretty straightforward day today and just some button text to clean up, imo.

Sunday:

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Fran:
First page says "Try It" but it probably should say "Continue".
First held edge says "Continue" and should say "On the edge".
Final edge says "Continue" but I think "Edged" would make sense.

Try it is correct, you try the key and it works, then you unlock it

Of the entire tease that I've seen so far this was felt like the least inspired day. But as you've already said, 1500+ pages I mean honestly that's one seriously mild complaint from me here. Still super impressed overall.

Will edit these soon. But yeah, Fran has other things on her mind at this point? . I did feel the actual 'tease' part of this tease got left behind in the story I was trying to tell a bit in places, Ironically.

Which ending did you get this time then? Can't see who gets what on the poll I'm going to guess 2

Yes, I did get 2. Good guess!

Then let me know once you see some more endings, because it made your comment very interesting

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Awesome tease overall. I got to Tuesday with Code 033 and it ended with the script malfunctioning. Is that a bug or an intentional end? If intentional, no worries... it was great either way but which ending was that? 1, 2 or 3?

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The script malfunctioning is not the end, it goes on beyond that. A lot more. You might have to click through the day and see what lies beyond. If you need help, feel free to ask. If its the page where the button breaks, give Fran a few seconds to fix it rather than pressing it repeatedly :)

I've only just played the first day and I'm very impressed already. I'm trying to play this in 'real time' (one day per day). We'll see how that goes.

I'm also working on my first tease, and I'm feeling more self-conscious about it after seeing how great yours is

Thats the best way, hope you enjoy :)

Not to worry though, I've left my very first tease up and its somewhat embarassing but eh, may as well. Best of luck with it!

I'm also working on my first tease, and I'm feeling more self-conscious about it after seeing how great yours is

Oh man don't do that to yourself! Shattered is one of, if not the best tease creators this site has seen over the years. Completely unfair to temper your expectations based on a tease like this one!

Thanks I've had years of practise at the very least and I'm over 500,000 words (including the script stuff like page names but not all the coding) into writing these, which helps if nothing else

[mr-max]

So, I have to say, once again a Masterpiece.

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I absolutely love the meta level and the hidden features. My love for your work probably also comes from your choice if models and with Caprice and Hailey you got some of my all time favourites in there. ;)

Endings

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I got all three endings at last. My first was number 2 but I managed to get 3 and 1 as well in replays. The variations to get there are also amazing. Nice work with different ways and codes

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I got the XIA easter egg, although never having played doki doki. The folder just felt strange, so I took a look. ;)
Your writing is amazing and you always hit at least my nerve for timings, and storytelling.

As always I'm looking forward to any new teases you will be producing! ;) More comments for me over at patreon.

Cheers and keep on going.

Mr Max

[Shattered]

Monday:

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Just to refresh how we got here, in case it matters...

Code 014
Code 041
Code 082
Code 094

If you'd rather not have the codes posted let me know and I'll edit those out and instead explain the path. I figured codes would be easier.

Xia says "look together to our classes" and I think she means "look forward to our classes together".
Fran's first page "Wednesday" isn't capitalized. :D
After being unlocked when getting hard Fran says "long enough and they that's it"... doesn't need the "they".
"A second for each edge we'll make you do today" page has an unnecessary "Continue" button.
Edging while Hailey is touching her breasts doesn't progress like it should... it just causes a loop. Have to edge while she's not touching her breasts to continue.

Done, thanks. Don't mind the codes being spoiler'd, Now I care more for giving people a save point with them if they want to stop than 'cheating'. If 'cheating' is how someone wants to enjoy the tease, go ahead :) Done the rest

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So just in general I want to comment that the "leaving the first sentence up and adding more text below it on the next page" theme for today was a bit jarring. Not that it's a bad mechanic just that it's not done in the rest of the tease, at least not to this extent.

When your balls are being held hostage, Xia refers to Hailey as "the sub".
When Hailey passes by you to get Seven, there's an "aa" on the page that I either don't get or shouldn't be there.
Getting Fran's failsafe question about her favorite number wrong progresses to the 'wrong answer' page, but when you click Continue on that page it takes you to the 'right answer' page.
After Fran's failsafe when you're "two out of three" steps in, the page says "Ready" and "Button2".

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I got Ending 2 this time. Honestly I think this one felt better than Ending 1. Will have to try and figure out Ending 3 next time. :)

Also, I followed the tease to the letter when Fran said to open another tab, so when I got back to the original tab I saw a Failsafe button had appeared there.... except clicking it doesn't do anything. Intentional?

Huh, didn't really notice there was more than normal on that day. I'll bear it in mind for the future

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the sub is correct is it not?
aa was missing a h - aah. added
Can you elaborate more on the failsafe question wrong answer? Couldn't find it where I thought you ment.
Fixed

Interesting, Ending 2 wasn't intended to be in until right up until i implemented the failsafe, then figured I should add something for if people don't get that they have to see what Kasia says or understand it, but it works just as an extra choice as well ^^ And yeah, ending 3 was quite a bit of work to include considering its so niche, but I think it adds a lot with the context of 1 and 2. personally...

And nope, it's supposed to link to the failsafe as well, but I missed a 1.

Thanks for all the feedback! I'll update guideme once I get that last query back.

So, I have to say, once again a Masterpiece.

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I absolutely love the meta level and the hidden features. My love for your work probably also comes from your choice if models and with Caprice and Hailey you got some of my all time favourites in there. ;)

Endings

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I got all three endings at last. My first was number 2 but I managed to get 3 and 1 as well in replays. The variations to get there are also amazing. Nice work with different ways and codes

Additional Comments

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I got the XIA easter egg, although never having played doki doki. The folder just felt strange, so I took a look. ;)
Your writing is amazing and you always hit at least my nerve for timings, and storytelling.

As always I'm looking forward to any new teases you will be producing! ;) More comments for me over at patreon.

Cheers and keep on going.

Mr Max

Thanks for the comments ^^ I didn't see any more on Patreon but will look out :P

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Folder makes much more sense with Doki, but hopefully theres something there anyway ^^

P.S.
I released this tease at the best possible ironic time -

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I was hype to use the Milovana reset sound and the same splash screen then with HTML5 a lot of people will just see that as a weird thing that doesnt make sense :P

[Shattered]

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the sub is correct is it not?

Can you elaborate more on the failsafe question wrong answer? Couldn't find it where I thought you ment.

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Well, Hailey is "the slut", isn't she? Shouldn't Xia have addressed her as slut?

For Fran's failsafe...she asks you her favorite number and if you get it wrong it goes to the page that says "nope, it's 12 and now you have to do 12 edges". Then when you hit Continue on that page you get the "yup, it's 12, I'm so glad you remembered" page.

Right I see now, I was looking at the wrong page! Thanks

[Benjismith37]

I tried Code 033 again, and once Fran says she will be right back and reminds you to turn on the sound... it seems to freeze and then returns to the start menu for a new tease. Any ideas what's going wrong? Thanks! I'm using the online webtease.

[Shattered]

I tried Code 033 again, and once Fran says she will be right back and reminds you to turn on the sound... it seems to freeze and then returns to the start menu for a new tease. Any ideas what's going wrong? Thanks! I'm using the online webtease.

Did you press new tease once you got there?

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Load 062 to get back there.

[Kristycookie]

Finished the tease today... holy fuck that was incredible!

I mean it goes beyond being just a 'tease', it delivers a unique narrative experience unlike anything I've seen on milovana before.

Thank you for all your hard work. I will eventually play again and try 'playing along' and see how that goes.

[Shattered]

Finished the tease today... holy fuck that was incredible!

I mean it goes beyond being just a 'tease', it delivers a unique narrative experience unlike anything I've seen on milovana before.

Thank you for all your hard work. I will eventually play again and try 'playing along' and see how that goes.

Well I'm not sure I'd go that far but thanks ^^

[mr-max]

Well I'm not sure I'd go that far but thanks ^^

He is right. ;)

[FrozenWolf]

This is a superb tease, thank you very much for your hard work putting this together.
Now stop messing with my mind!

These are the endings I've experienced so far (added to the straw poll):

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The existentialism certainly caught me off guard.
* Ending 2: Eternal Bliss
* Ending 1: Out of this world

I poured over the XML of v1.01 21/10/2018 to see if I can spot any irregularities, and I spotted a few things that might be issues, although I don't think it affects the experience much.

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Page: wedspurec34
Page: wedspurer34
Page: wedspured34
Page: wedsgoodr34
Missing Image: wedcap(47).jpg

Page: intro9
Missing Image: door2.jpg

Page: franstart
Missing Page: "New Tease" -> thewormhole1
Missing Page: "Options" -> franoptions
Deadend Page: "Load Tease" -> francode
(this might be intentional of course!)
Deadend Page: "Toys List" -> frantoy
(this might be intentional of course!)

Page: code89
Missing Page: "9" -> manuela1

Page: nurse26
Missing Page: "Failsafe" -> failsafe

[FrozenWolf]

The GuideMe XML version v1.01 21/10/2018 shows three tiny errors that would cause three pages to become end pages (i.e. no timer or buttons), although these are right at the end anyway, so I expect most wouldn't notice.

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Page: frantoy
<!--Error: buttons(franstart#,:"Main Menu"))-->

Page: francode
<!--Error: buttons(franstart#,:"Main Menu"))-->

Page: credits3
<!--Error: go(credits4#))-->

Looking forward to getting ending 3 at some point.

[kenshin]

Absolutely fantastic tease, easily one of the best on the site. I even played through multiple times to get all the endings and easter eggs.

Anyway, a couple glitches I noticed in the GuideMe version:

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All of Fran's images in "052" are broken.
At the end of Monday leading to "038" clicking the button to continue leads to a broken page.
In "058" if you choose denial the confirmation button is just labelled "button2".

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Where do you use the "mad scientist" line Xia gives you? I'm pretty sure there's nowhere in this tease to use it, so I'm guessing it's either one of your other teases or it's something you have planned for the future.