FB: Chocolate Angel Makes You Work

[texturedshroom]

Nice idea. Nice instructions. Hot girl. But the writing was lacking.

I've done this a few times too. I get so caught up in making the instructions for a tease good that I forget about making the writing good. Tease girls need to have some personality, and I really don't think "I'm black and you're white" is a personality.

I gave this a 3. It could've been much more, but I look forward to more teases by you where the writing is as good as the instructions. This could've easily been a 5.

[ginjon]

In response to your feedback I have brought the tease offline to re-write. You are right, I could have done a lot better. I hope to return it online with the improvements soon. Thank you for your comments.

[texturedshroom]

I'm sorry; I didn't mean for you to take it down. I think you should have waited for others' feedback as well.