Feedback: How i will use you

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Cider
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Feedback: How i will use you

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This is my first tease ever! :w00t: Finally i have given back to the community i :love: love :love: so much.

So what did everyone think? What did you like? What didn't you like?
I had fun with this and plan to do it again, every bit of info. i can gather will be helpful.

:yes: Happy Teasing!!!
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Re: Feedback: How i will use you

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First of all, the rating speaks for itself. You've produced a solid tease that a lot of people seem to like, so congratulations. Personally, I found it very balanced. It included a lot of my personal hot buttons (nipple clamps, a little ball abuse), along with things I don't like as much. I'm not a big fan of anal, but your writing was engaging enough that I got into the tease, and it pushed me further than I've been pushed in a while (in a lot of good ways).

You had a couple of grammatical errors (which I tend to pick on quite a bit), for example you used "your" when you meant "you're"--"your" is always possessive (e.g. hit your balls, pinch your nipples, etc.), while "you're" is the contraction of "you" and "are" (e.g. you're going to regret this, while you're hitting yourself, etc.) Maybe you know this already and just missed one, but it happens often enough that I feel the need to make the explanation (especially for people who aren't as familiar with the English language, of which there are many on this site).

So, that's my one critical gripe. Overall, this was an above-average tease with good writing, creativity, and personality. Good job!

~joeliwan
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Re: Feedback: How i will use you

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I thought it was a great tease.

The girl in the pics was hot. (although she does kind of look like a girl I used to date.)

The santa thing was a little weird, but I think that's just because I wasn't sure it was supposed to be a real guy in a santa suit or it was a big doll or something.

The way to cum at the end was good. It wasn't your standard ruined orgasm, but it could be even more frustrating. After you've had those spurts and reach up to milk out those last few drops you probably are already finished with the orgasm, so it's almost like she's tricking you into a ruined one. Plus you have a vibrator in your ass and by that point your face/mouth would have cum all over so you may end the tease feeling frustrated and dirty.

Good work.

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Re: Feedback: How i will use you

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Thanks for the feedback!

I agree with your statement about already being through with the orgasm pretty much by the time you reach up to finish off, but at least for me, when i reach up and finish off with this method there are 2 or 3 or so waves of "almost" pleasure, and it leaves me pretty frusterated.
I'm glad you two enjoyed it!!

Sorry about the few grammar mistakes, u think with english as my first language i could get it right! :blush:

I wasn't sure about the santa either, in the tease i wanted to make it seem like it was a doll, but there were a few pics where i could swear i saw a real face. :-O (CREEPY!) Not so good to me, but my brain included those pics in the story line so OH WELL!!!
i had a lot of fun with this tease, and i cant wait to get behind the wheel again with my next tease.
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