FB: Ruin Contract by baconman888

[lmind]

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=27908

This tease is a hidden gem. It deserves a feedback thread.

It is a "contract" tease, meant to be revisited and replayed over the course of several days (or weeks, if you prefer). The concept probably isn't 100% original, but it is still a refreshing change of pace from the usual one-and-done tease formula, and it is the one of the best-executed "come-back-when-you're-ready-for-more" type of teases I've seen on the site. I'll be honest... usually when a tease ends with "try again tomorrow," (etc) I don't. Been there -- done that -- don't have a strong desire to do it all again. But Ruin Contract is good, interesting, and varied enough to actually bring me back 2 or 3 times.

My only constructive criticism would be that it's probably not varied enough for me to revisit more than 3 times -- but that's asking a lot from a tease, and it doesn't detract from the fact that those first 3 visits were a lot of fun. I've started writing (and failed to finish) several truly replayable teases, with heavy use of randomness, and, to make it work, you basically have to write 10-15+ teases worth of content into a single tease. That's asking a lot from an author (just ask Venus, author of Maze of Passion!). So the fact that baconman's Ruin Contract is replayable even 3 times is praiseworthy.

Baconman, I hope you make more teases like this, perhaps with some randomness to make the tasks more varied and unpredictable. Thanks for your hard work! 5*

-lmind

[baconman888]

I appriciate the feedback. I haven't figured out how they do the random feature in teases, but my next tease for sure will have something that deals with randomness and be more intricate. Ruin contract was relatively straight forward.

[Rocky69]

who is the girl in this one?