Feedback "You have been had"

Slaveboy90 · Post by **Slaveboy90** » Sun Aug 17, 2014 11:58 pm

Just published my newest Tease:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=27014

Please give me feedback about it !
Do you like the story ? Should i enlarge it or should it just be a means to an end ?
Are there any Bugs ?

Feel free to tell me ;)

cockheroaddict · Post by **cockheroaddict** » Mon Aug 18, 2014 8:57 pm

I liked it overall but felt respectfully that it should have had metronome audio or ticking sounds in it.
Also the girls seemed to have little to none teasing of the viewer, it was like all of a sudden have you read the contract and then bam ! they were all into it, maybe the beginning should have been a bit longer and more developed.

Slaveboy90 · Post by **Slaveboy90** » Mon Aug 18, 2014 9:03 pm

thanks for your feedback, thats why I am asking for it ;)
So, should I enlarge the story at all ?
Thanks for the tip with the metronome, Part 2 is nearly finished, but in part 3 I will add some metronome ;)

Should I add some other things ? like pain, anal,....
or is just stroking and edging better ?

cockheroaddict · Post by **cockheroaddict** » Mon Aug 18, 2014 9:13 pm

My opinion is I say just fast, and then faster still, and then even crazy faster stroking and edging.To the point where it is damn near impossible to make it through at all.

And yes enlarge the story in my opinion that would be great.

And maybe more girls so it is a longer tease, perhaps they are different kinds of girls also, a variety of styles or personalities, but all of them making you fast stroke. If you could put moaning audio that would be great, sometimes that is all it takes to put someone past the edge.

I personally am not into pain but there could be a "pain room" which some people could go into and others could skip that option.

Slaveboy90 · Post by **Slaveboy90** » Mon Aug 18, 2014 9:35 pm

alright ! as I said in my previous post, the second one is nearly finished, so I will consider your tips for part 3 :)

Thanks alot :)

maester · Post by **maester** » Tue Aug 19, 2014 3:13 pm

I feel like there is literally no choices in this tease. While I understand how the PC pretty much has no choice in the matter, I would have liked to see some possible paths, or at least changing context to the situation. For example, we could choose to be accepting or try to struggle against our situation.
It would add replayability and maybe allow for more fetishes to be explored.

Also, it is a bit short. Maybe add more girls?

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