This is/was my first tease, and I don't know if/how I went wrong. There are always bound to be mistakes or improvements I could make for the next ones. Mostly I'm looking for feedback on the lines. I wasn't sure when I made it, and I'm still not sure now whether the difficulty is at an acceptable level.
Any criticism or suggestion is welcome!
Also, if anyone knows the name of the model, that would be grand!
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I have spent my whole life scared – frightened of things that could happen, might happen, might not happen. Fifty years I spent like that. Finding myself awake at three in the morning. But you know what? Ever since my diagnosis, I sleep just fine.
What I came to realize is that fear, that's the worst of it. That's the real enemy. So, get up, get out in the real world and you kick that bastard as hard as you can right in the teeth.
- Walter White, Breaking Bad
In general I loved the line writing, but it should be more embedded into the story and not only as a bunch at the end. Maybe a requirement for being allowed to cum or a punishment as a consequence for a decision or a wrong answers, but always within the tease and not at the end.
I didn't like most of the other tasks though (like cleaning etc.). But I would love to see more teases with line writing. Mixed with a lot of stroking/edging. Maybe in a school setting? So line writing could be a punishment for poor performance. Poor performance could be based on quizzes or not being able to do a certain amount of strokes without edging in a given time etc. (if you are interested in some well suited quizzes let me know, then I could PM you what I mean).
Thanks Dragoul! That's some excellent advice. It's already too late for the next one in the series, but for the one after I'll take your advice on having them throughout the tease.
Thank you VERY much for the gallery, that's going to help tremendously.
Edit : Just realized, I am so using that quiz idea later.
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I have spent my whole life scared – frightened of things that could happen, might happen, might not happen. Fifty years I spent like that. Finding myself awake at three in the morning. But you know what? Ever since my diagnosis, I sleep just fine.
What I came to realize is that fear, that's the worst of it. That's the real enemy. So, get up, get out in the real world and you kick that bastard as hard as you can right in the teeth.
- Walter White, Breaking Bad
I THINK I submitted a suggestion, I'm not sure if I actually did or not, so I'll send it again later. If you see 2 submissions from me, I'm not trying to be pushy, just thorough
I have spent my whole life scared – frightened of things that could happen, might happen, might not happen. Fifty years I spent like that. Finding myself awake at three in the morning. But you know what? Ever since my diagnosis, I sleep just fine.
What I came to realize is that fear, that's the worst of it. That's the real enemy. So, get up, get out in the real world and you kick that bastard as hard as you can right in the teeth.
- Walter White, Breaking Bad
Loved these two teases, thanks. All the tasks, including the lines pushed my buttons. Would have preferred the lines a bit more challenging, but i think i'm in the minority, so just keep right on doing what you're doing!
Love the scenario too, look forward to exploring more.
I think would be better for the fantasy if you had created an account on writeforme called Miss Katherine, and then the writeforme task would say, "You are doing this task for Miss Katherine" with a picture of her, rather than of, err hum, couisin_it
Good point, Arthurb, I hadn't considered that. Thanks a lot.
I'll get on that later. Not right now though, it's going to take me about half an hour to paste everything over.
Edit : I swear down I'll be on the case just as soon as I can get on the other computer in privacy. This one is balls.
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I have spent my whole life scared – frightened of things that could happen, might happen, might not happen. Fifty years I spent like that. Finding myself awake at three in the morning. But you know what? Ever since my diagnosis, I sleep just fine.
What I came to realize is that fear, that's the worst of it. That's the real enemy. So, get up, get out in the real world and you kick that bastard as hard as you can right in the teeth.
- Walter White, Breaking Bad
I liked the new installment. Also the parts where you had to stare at her feet or tell her how amazing she is were really great! The line writing tasks were far too hard for me though. It would have taken me hours if I had really completed them. Please make them easier the text time, esp. without any extra lines for mistakes. And I would also love to see much more stroking/edging and maybe a little nipple torture?
I'll turn the difficulty of the writing down for the next one (it's higher than before at the minute, but that's just for the line-junkies who did them all already)
I'll see about putting some more edging in too, but I can't promise anything
EDIT : First tease now update to MissKatherines writeforme account. Will do the next one later. Took longer than I expected.
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I have spent my whole life scared – frightened of things that could happen, might happen, might not happen. Fifty years I spent like that. Finding myself awake at three in the morning. But you know what? Ever since my diagnosis, I sleep just fine.
What I came to realize is that fear, that's the worst of it. That's the real enemy. So, get up, get out in the real world and you kick that bastard as hard as you can right in the teeth.
- Walter White, Breaking Bad
The Miss Katherine teases are definitely among the best. I love how degrading she is. I look forward to future teases, hoping she gets even worse. Keep up the good work:)
