Feedback for "Here to make you squirm"

[ginjon]

This is my first tease so you're feedback would be much appreciated.

I want to know if you enjoyed it.

I want to know how I could make better teases in future.

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=2896

[thedane]

Hi ginjon

Very simply put: A nice tease.

I tend to like teases with a little more of a setting instead of just a set of instructions. If you spend a little time of the setting, f.x. her motivation and the users motivation for following her stroke orders you feed the users imagination and draw him into the tease.

That is about the only thing I can think of. Everything else is great, the variation of assignments, the pictures, the language and so on.

Keep up the good work.

[cumhardy]

Good tease

I also like teases with a bit more of a back-story or a motivation. Ive said that before on another thread, BUT (as I have a very dual personality), in some teases (like this) its cool when the motivation is left unexplained because I can fill in the blanks myself

[ginjon]

Thanks for the feedback!

I'm certainly interested in the idea of backstory, motivation. I will play with that.

[cumhardy]

Thanks for the feedback!

I'm certainly interested in the idea of backstory, motivation. I will play with that.

Yeah but also remember the flipside: Too much rambling away from the tease script can be distracting