A Journey For My Body

[HolyAnarchy]

Well....what do you guys think about it? it`s my first tease and I am a bit nervous.

[Nezhul]

Are you sure it has enough denial in it?

p.s. don't be offended by the flood. I don't read normal teases, so cant say anything on topic, but by the marks it seems to be pretty good for the first try, keep it up!

[davefrancis89]

Hi,

I really enjoyed it - it's pretty tough, especially towards the end. I'm the type who does struggle to hold it in so it was a challenge.

I think the pain part is excellent.

Adding dice to the classic format is always a good plan - I especially liked the multiple roles idea which increases the tension nicely, especially if you have seen one you don't want to do.

One pointer would be that the grammar and proof reading could be a touch better in places - there are a few typos etc, but that happens a lot on here so I'm pretty used to them.

For me personally - I like a longer term denial instruction at the end, but this is just my own personal fantasies so I wont mark the tease down for it.

All in all, I really enjoyed it.

Thank you for putting it up.

[chuck541]

I really liked it. Keep up the good work!

[slut2122]

guys do not belive her online tease that she is publishing, it's a rip off, it is all a lie. i have also written a case to paypal for taking money and not provied service. please be aware of this user.