FB: Sibling Rivalry

[1885]

Hello peoples, starting a new tease series.

Please to put feedback here for make better of future installment.

[tBone]

Question. Is it possible for you to not be amazing at this whole writing thing?

Actually, I would love for someone to start a standard where everyone uses one size up from the default font size. The default is just a tiny bit too small for me.

[Fusion89]

I'm just getting myself acquainted with Milovana and all it has to offer. Saw a couple of Webteases and went through some teases for TeaseMe.

Have to say that yours has been one of the best I experienced so far. Have no negative feedback. Can't wait for the second installment.

[Riikka]

I think I encountered a bug in the kitchen (might have also been my browser but then the slides don't make sense):

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When closing the end of the kitchen scene, there is first a slide with a command to cum but the "I came"-button didn't work and it seemed like there was a timed transition to next slide with "Ruin it"-command that is kind of irrelevant after the previous one already told you to come.

[dbt]

Part 1 is great. Thanks!

Only comment is that if it possible to put an offline version on that would be great. I really like Teasme since the pic quality can be so much better, PLUS my internet connection gets flakey from time to time & it sucks to have it go down in the middle of a long tease.

[janmb]

Question. Is it possible for you to not be amazing at this whole writing thing?

I doubt that very much

Yet another brilliant work in its beginnings - can't wait for the rest!

[1885]

I think I encountered a bug in the kitchen

Not a bug. The page in question...

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is a psych out. She tells you to cum but the instruction only lasts for three seconds before switching to the ruin page. It's like getting your hopes up right at the point of cumming before taking it away from you. The "I came" deliberately links back to the same page. The only reason it's there is to make the reader believe they're actually being allowed to cum for real.

I'm just getting myself acquainted with Milovana and all it has to offer.

Welcome to Milovana, thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it!

if it possible to put an offline version on that would be great.

People usually upload mine to TeaseMe pretty quickly, I don't think you'll have to wait long. I just don't mess with TeaseMe myself because I don't like the left/right format. I prefer the top/bottom format of Nyx.

Is it possible for you to not be amazing at this whole writing thing?

I doubt that very much

I don't know, I thought my writing in the original post of this thread was pretty atrocious.

[Riikka]

Not a bug.

Oh well.. I still think that isn't very working plan...

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..because with the countdown one can (or can't :D) pretty much time the cumming correctly so three second delay is quite long, especially when clicking the "I came" button restarts the timer as it loops back to the same page. Because there was no indication that the button did anything, that's why I thought that it actually is a bug and after one would have came, the next page came way too late after some clicks to the button.

If you want to keep the psych effect, I'd remove the button and shorten the delay.

[1885]

I still think that isn't very working plan...

Okay, I changed the button so that...

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...it redirects to the ruin page instead of the psych out page. That eliminates the possibility of clicking the button over and over to stay on the psych out page. Although I'm not sure why anyone would.

[elvisomar]

You have a wicked mind, my friend. You've topped yourself with this one. I'd like to know who the models are, if you wouldn't mind. And thanks for sharing your madness with the rest of us.

[janmb]

Part 2 was just as great, can't wait for more

[d3vi0n]

Only comment is that if it possible to put an offline version on that would be great.

Uploading part 1 & 2 right now... go to the TeaseMe-Thread for download ;)

Will post some feedback after playing part 1...

[1885]

You have a wicked mind, my friend. You've topped yourself with this one. I'd like to know who the models are, if you wouldn't mind. And thanks for sharing your madness with the rest of us.

Haha, truth be told I'm still holding some of my personal depravity back. I came close to letting it all hang out once or twice while writing teases before, but I had to rein it in. Glad you're enjoying this one so far.

The models are Natasha Belle and Hailey Leigh.

Part 2 was just as great, can't wait for more

Milo's being slow for me today, which is making it hard to write cause it takes forever to load the pictures I'm working with, but I'll get there.

Will post some feedback after playing part 1...

Looking forward to it!

[dbt]

Uploading part 1 & 2 right now... go to the TeaseMe-Thread for download ;)

Will post some feedback after playing part 1...

Thanks!

1885- I agree with you on the left/right in Teasme versus the top/bottom in a normal flashtease - much easier to read with the text on the bottom, but the low quality of pics online is kind of a bummer.

[jackstock]

you are amazing