FEEDBACK: Grinds

[Nezhul]

A good tease if you look at the activities alone. However the storyline kills it for me.
First of all, I'm not into incest as such, and I don't sexualize my family at all, so it's kinda a little turn-off for me in itself. But the thing the kills it for me is just monstrous unrealism of characters. What they talk about is ridiculous, the logic, the plot knots... A story about a girl who has to study male masturbation, and her mom, to help the matters, gets her brother (the player) to stroke in front of her, while she stripps for him with an innosence of an ADD kid. Seriously, I can't take the story serious, it makes me facepalm too much, and I have to take my hand off my dick to do that.

That's my feedback, it's personal opinion, so don't be upset too much. But as it goes, a more serious and realistic story would have made this tease much, MUCH better.

[AllanM]

I think I would agree with the plot/storyline being a little simplistic. And I think that ties into its being an extremely short tease. I think extending the length of it, as it did seem pretty short to me, may have helped in making a less simplistic and adding a somewhat more realistic feel to it. Along the same lines as well, I think it just sort of jumped into things too fast at the beginning and could have had more build up or background.

Other than that, the general idea of it was very good.
I thought the pics were great, and even though I myself also am not into incest, I generally find it fairly easy to replace the thought with a more stepsister/stepmother (or just a mother/daughter) thing to make it more appealing to me. You might consider that in any future stories as well, or not.

Thanks for another tease!

[PedroZorro]

Simple, original, short but very good.. I'm not into incest either, and I don't sexualize my family at all; but I enjoyed the tease pretending I was another person, for my mother would not be able to ask me to jerk me off in front of her and my sister.
Great tease for those who are always in a hurry..