Hi,
because of my quiet bad english, which is good enough to read english teases, but to bad to write english teases yet, I wrote my first tease in the german language.
This tease was a first try to make a halfway good and interesting tease with the Nyx - The FlashTease Editor.
For teases I want to write in the future it would be very nice, if you can give me feedback. Till this point of time alreade over 500 times my tease was opend, so please write your opinion. What is good, what is bad?
So I can try to make the next tease better.
Feedback "Lisa (German)"
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Re: Feedback "Lisa (German)"
I think this is the first (I am sure someone will correct me if I am wrong) Flash Tease in German. I am happy to see someone take the plunge.
I cannot read the German, but I can generally piece together the context...mostly because I've read and done a lot of teases. The tease looks well put together, and it seems to flow well.
The model is very attractive to me.
Thanks for taking the time, and making the effort, to write a tease.
I cannot read the German, but I can generally piece together the context...mostly because I've read and done a lot of teases. The tease looks well put together, and it seems to flow well.
The model is very attractive to me.
Thanks for taking the time, and making the effort, to write a tease.
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Re: Feedback "Lisa (German)"
Halli Hallo Landsmann! Ich war auch sehr erfreut endlich mal einen Flash-Tease in deutscher Sprache vorzufinden. Wirklich sehr gut gemacht. Paar coole Ideen und die Sache mit dem Point-of-No-Return war genial eingeflochten! Da ich das sehr gerne mache, war das quasi ein Traum der in Erfüllung ging!
Mach weiter so!
Viele Grüße
In English:
Hello Compatriot. I was very happy to see a german Flash-Tease yesterday in the Webtease Section. I think it's very well done. A lot of great Ideas were used and the Point-of-No-Return Thing was genious! I love this special treat very much and so its use was a dream come true for me.
Keep up the good work!
Greetz
Mach weiter so!
Viele Grüße
In English:
Hello Compatriot. I was very happy to see a german Flash-Tease yesterday in the Webtease Section. I think it's very well done. A lot of great Ideas were used and the Point-of-No-Return Thing was genious! I love this special treat very much and so its use was a dream come true for me.
Keep up the good work!
Greetz
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Re: Feedback "Lisa (German)"
Danke euch.
Ich freue mich, dass euch der Tease (sagt man das so auf Deutsch?) offenbar gefallen hat.
Im Moment arbeite ich an einem neuen Flash-Tease mit mehreren Teilen. Wahrscheinlich werden es drei, vllt. aber auch mehr sein. Diese Serie werde ich auch zunächst in Deutsch schreiben - und sie wird wohl unter dem Titel "Abenteuerurlaub" laufen (Ist sie gut, kann ich sie vllt. auch später übersetzten.) . Die Serie wird eine Rahmenhandlung haben, die die Teile zu einem Ganzen zusammenfügt, und die Handlung wird umfangreicher sein als die in meinem ersten Tease.
Auch wird es unterschiedliche Models geben, die mit dem Opfer vor dem PC spielen werden.
So habe ich die Möglichkeit viele unterschiedliche Techniken des Teasings etc. mit einzubringen.
Auf konkrete Wünsche/Kritik kann ich aber nur eingehen, wenn es noch weitere Kritik zum ersten Teil gibt, sowie Anregungen für die neue Serie. Ansonsten muss ich ins Blaue schreiben und es ist schwieirg mich zu verbessern..
Daher: Ich warte auf weitere Antworten.
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Well, an now a short version of the german text in english:
Thank you for your posts.
It makes me happy to read, that the tease obviously was Ok.
At the moment I am working on a flash-tease with three (or more parts). I write that one in German, too. Maybe its titel will be "Abenteuerurlaub". If it becomes a good tease, i will maybe translate it into english later. The tease will have a story, which starts in the first part, an ends in the last one. So the parts will have some thing in common. The tease will have more than one model in it, who plays with the user in front of the PC. So it is possible for me, to put many different technics of teasing into it.
To rise up the quality of my teases I need your opinion what was good and was not in my first tease.
I'm waiting for your post.
Ich freue mich, dass euch der Tease (sagt man das so auf Deutsch?) offenbar gefallen hat.
Im Moment arbeite ich an einem neuen Flash-Tease mit mehreren Teilen. Wahrscheinlich werden es drei, vllt. aber auch mehr sein. Diese Serie werde ich auch zunächst in Deutsch schreiben - und sie wird wohl unter dem Titel "Abenteuerurlaub" laufen (Ist sie gut, kann ich sie vllt. auch später übersetzten.) . Die Serie wird eine Rahmenhandlung haben, die die Teile zu einem Ganzen zusammenfügt, und die Handlung wird umfangreicher sein als die in meinem ersten Tease.
Auch wird es unterschiedliche Models geben, die mit dem Opfer vor dem PC spielen werden.
So habe ich die Möglichkeit viele unterschiedliche Techniken des Teasings etc. mit einzubringen.
Auf konkrete Wünsche/Kritik kann ich aber nur eingehen, wenn es noch weitere Kritik zum ersten Teil gibt, sowie Anregungen für die neue Serie. Ansonsten muss ich ins Blaue schreiben und es ist schwieirg mich zu verbessern..
Daher: Ich warte auf weitere Antworten.
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Well, an now a short version of the german text in english:
Thank you for your posts.
It makes me happy to read, that the tease obviously was Ok.
At the moment I am working on a flash-tease with three (or more parts). I write that one in German, too. Maybe its titel will be "Abenteuerurlaub". If it becomes a good tease, i will maybe translate it into english later. The tease will have a story, which starts in the first part, an ends in the last one. So the parts will have some thing in common. The tease will have more than one model in it, who plays with the user in front of the PC. So it is possible for me, to put many different technics of teasing into it.
To rise up the quality of my teases I need your opinion what was good and was not in my first tease.
I'm waiting for your post.