Feedback: A Very Good Day

[Humblest]

Are you by any chance planning a sequel or another tease of similar style? It would be very much appreciated!

[supermokkori]

supermokkori, this was an awesome tease. Indeed, it was one of the very best flash teases. I really enjoyed the beating to the metronome thing until a timer runs out. It was also nice that when the time came for the big O, it really sped up, plus there were the girl voices and it continued to repeat itself until the O arrived.

I am not even going to talk about the production values, which were simply excellent and I really, really liked the fact that the tease was pretty long.

The thing I liked the least about the tease were some of the long pauses between non-stroking scenes. What I mean is that for example there was some text, which I read in say 10 seconds, but it took about a minute or two to switch to the next page of text. A continue button after each page of text (and I do enjoy the test - it is the long wait after already having read it that was the problem) would probably solve this problem. The tease was, nonetheless, excellent, but I though I would also throw in some constructive criticism.

Humblest, you humble me with your praise.

Thanks a lot for your very kind comments. I don't know if my "production values" were really higher than some of the VERY top Flashteases, but tried my best to make a Flashtease worthy of being considered a solid one.

And I hear your concern regarding "reading text" and that's something I plan to do a better job in my next Flashtease. I always liked Flashteases that required little "button clicking" and flowed kinda naturally. However, since I plan to have most of my future teases to have a lot of different "choice paths", I'm going to stop worrying about that aspect.

As for my next Flashtease, I've already gotten 99% of the images and have started the Flashtease coding. It will be mostly sound-based (i.e. metronome) stroking and edging with a bit more CBT (but not the main focus). It's actually a sequel, but not a sequel to 'A Very Good Day'. I don't plan to have it done till maybe middle of next month.

[Humblest]

Excellent - I am looking forward to your next creation. Metronome/sound-based teases are the best and with your skills it is definitely something to look forward to!

[SomeOne]

First of all, to give it a short summarize: FANTASTIC Tease! Tanks a lot for creating and posting!

To get more into detail, this tease deserves an extensive review.

1) I want to mention the "bad" things first - but i didn't find any completely negative details. (yep.)

• What is worth a note: I am quite a fast reader, for me the delays for readings texts was slightly long, but ok. This may cause trouble for others, personally i would have preferred more continue-buttons for that. I do understand that buttons may be distracting for others, and aditionally timers prevent users from just skipping through the tease, just wanted to point this out.
• Same thing is the lack of "jumping points". It is quite a long tease, maybe you should add a note at the beginning, that the reader shouldn't be in a hurry when attempting ;) I have seen the possibility to jump to selected sections of the tease in other teases, but as for the timers, this is a double-edged sword, because it again allows users to skip through parts, where the creator maybe intended a complete experience.
• Another completely individual thing: The tease is very "soft", speaking in terms of BDSM. This isn't a bad thing really, but hey - i want to find some things that are not perfect

2) Now for the "good" things. The tease is awesome in total, combining many positive aspects in my opinion.

• First of all, it features personalities. I had the feeling of meeting woman who are not there for me, but have a life before and after that. All of them. Of course the contacts are straight forward, hey, it is a tease, not real life - and a very good day. Side note:

  Spoiler: show

  In one of the endings (boxer), the term "a very good day" seemed quite ironic

• This includes the main character, the person who lives this day. For me you managed to create a brilliant mixture of being that person, while it is still another man, with his personality. A really good mixture of decisions i can choose, and story telling where other options maybe come in mind, but are not appropriate for the whole thing. I felt like playing some mini role playing game!
• Variety. While all encounters (can) become sexual, it happens in different scenarios, i liked all of them. Good fantasies involved and developed!
• Story telling. Actually, this summarizes the points before. You managed to create a really good story, not just some "Do this" and "Do that" thing. Actually not only one story, but something like an interactive story, where you can choose paths. Ok, that's what flash teases are for, but here it is actually used. Random interviews, different encounters at the gym, while still having a central theme.

3) At last, the points you mentioned.

• POV hardcore images: I am not an expert here, i just can say i enjoyed all of the pictures, didn't find any of them distracting or off-putting.
• Metronome-sound stroking: Mostly i ignore it. This is not just for your tease, for me it's just to "mechanic", and i get distracted by concentrating on the sound and stroking accordingly. I am not exactly sure what you mean by "new things". If it is what i think:

  Spoiler: show

  Stroking x strokes before timer runs out? I liked this more than the metronome stroking, but that's easy :D

I enjoyed the tease as a whole, more for the fantasy and story than for the rules and challenges. I did follow most of them roughly, and really enjoyed this, also sexually, i came twice in the end ;) I did the tease one time completely (reaching an end with bree), and then started multiple instances at the same time, to find out about the missed encounters. My second orgasm was with Wendy - again nearing the end of the day :)

Thanks again!
SomeOne

[supermokkori]

Wow SomeOne!

Thanks for the very in-depth review and taking the time for all your fantastic feedback.

I do appreciate the critiques and I look to utilize your suggestions in my next FlashTease as follows:

What is worth a note: In the future, if I do story building elements that may require 15 seconds of an average reading speed (subjective, I know), I'm going to put a Continue button for "faster readers" like you.

Jumping points: I considered putting "jumping points" near the end of completing the tease as it dawned on me that, "oh crap... this is an hour plus long tease". But I got a little frustrated with how Nyx will sometimes thoughtlessly erase chunks of my Flashtease code, so I just pushed it up. I will have a "code enabled" jumping point for my next tease and will consider "code enabled" jumping points for any future teases I do that are longer than an hour.

too "soft: Yeah, I'm not a big fan of BDSM, but I don't mind some pain if it enhances the pleasure elements. I don't plan to do any real intense BDSM/CBT type teases, but will include some more elements in the hope of enhancing the viewing/stroking experience.

Now, on to what you liked about the tease -

Personalities - I'm really glad you felt that each of the girls you encountered had "personalities" cuz that was EXACTLY what I was trying to do. Sometimes, I feel tease creators don't focus enough on character development in their teases and utilizing images appropriate to their characters bearing; I mean, if you have a series of images of a cute teen girl smiley all the time, it's sort of "out of character" to be barking out orders to "slap your balls"... that's just me I guess.

Main character personality - I was actually a little concerned giving the main character "personality" as I kinda mirrored his responses and thought processes to my own - a clumsy, pervy smart-ass. But so far, no one seems to mind that though in my next tease, going to keep the "user perspective" a bit more plain vanilla.

Variety - Thanks for the comments on this, as I tried to use different adult themes (i.e. office sex encounters, sexy gym workouts, voyeurism, schoolgirl, and so on) so that it would appeal to everyone... well that and the images I chose made it pretty natural to use.

Metronome-sound stroking - Thanks for the comments. Maybe it's me, but I find metronome-sound stroking Flashteases the most effective way to convey and "control" the arousal intensity when it comes to stroking. Maybe it's cuz I'm a fan of the 'Cock Hero' videos, but it's more that I don't need to "think" or "watch a timer" with metronome Flashteases... when I hear the stroke beat, it just makes it that much more easier to read the story text and enjoy the sexy images.

Oh and when I meant "new things", I was talking about the actual "audio of girls" that I combined with the stroke beats with some of the girls. For those girls, i actually used audio of those particular girls - so the voice of Bree you hear in the final encounter? It's actually Bree's real voice (real name being Bree Daniels).

Finally, just as an FYI, there are four "happy endings", so you just have one more to find, SomeOne.

Thanks again for such phenomenal feedback - it really encourages me to make my next Flashtease even better.

[Humblest]

Hugely committed feedback from SomeOne - wow - impressive and admirable that you put so much effort into feedback. I completely agree on the subjective speed of reading issue - a continue button would really have helped.

But to illustrate the subjectivity of this issue, I really appreciate the lack of BSDM and pain, which are huge turn offs for me. Also, I love metronome-based stroking - in fact I like it so much that I outright don't participate in teases that don't have it. This all goes to show, just how subjective our feedback can be.

[supermokkori]

Finally, just as an FYI, there are four "happy endings", so you just have one more to find, SomeOne.

Just for my own curiousity...

Spoiler: show

Are the four happy endings:

1) Alex
2) Wendy
3) Bree #1 (Saying 'Yes' to the arrangement)
4) Bree #2 (Saying 'No' to the arragement)

Nope.... you're missing an early one in the office.

[supermokkori]

Damn, can't find it. I think I know who it's with, just can't find it.

Well, once you strip all the other potentials in the office, its not too hard to find as long as you're not so fast.

[Humblest]

I found the same one as jp and cannot find the one in the office. Yeah, I too think I know who it is, but neither going slow nor fast seemed to lead there.

[notshyguy]

Oh and when I meant "new things", I was talking about the actual "audio of girls" that I combined with the stroke beats with some of the girls. For those girls, i actually used audio of those particular girls - so the voice of Bree you hear in the final encounter? It's actually Bree's real voice (real name being Bree Daniels).

That. Sounds. Awesome.

[taylordawn]

i just wanted to say i love this tease even though i am not a huge fan of Metronomes

[deragoku]

Something different, this is very good. And POV-image, I'm just glad to have a camera with eye contact.

[Humblest]

Hey supermokkori, how is the new tease coming along? Are you still working on it or is it on hiatus?

[supermokkori]

Hey supermokkori, how is the new tease coming along? Are you still working on it or is it on hiatus?

heh, I'm slowly working on it. Right now, I'm finishing my 2nd "Edging Experiment" video tease that I'm hoping to have up tomorrow.

As for the next FlashTease, I'm looking to push it up early next month - I'm actually waiting to see when Uberman will push out his next FlashTease masterpiece as I don't want to take any attention away from his masterful works.

[Frozen88]

Don't let us wait
I really loved A Very Good Day