The One In Vegas - Feedback

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The One In Vegas - Feedback

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Hi there!

I hope you enjoy my tease, it's with my favourite model "Penny Flame".

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=14715

And if you'd like to drop me a few lines here, maybe tell me if you liked it or what I could do better then I would love it to death :-)

Merry Christmas! :party:
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I will tell i enjoyed ever painful moment of it. It took a long time, and at the end I truly thought I was going to be denied again. I almost ruined it. Thank you for the great tease and hope to see more from you.
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Best christmas present I've had this year. Wow that left me speechless.
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It left me cumless. That was really hard, but worth every exertion. I have to admit that I didn't make it all the way, but I now have a goal to deny myself for at least a week, and then try to get all the way to the end. It won't be as suspenseful, but it will still be a trial.
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I thank you for all the effort that you clearly put into this tease. A definite five stars and one of my favorites. It was incredibly well-written, never seemed repetitive (which is good going for such a long tease) and your choice of model was perfect. It also avoided the biggest pitfall of a flashtease for me - timers where kept short and to a minimum. Another big positive is that the text was nicely split up over several pages instead of having one big chunk of text on a single page - it must have taken you ages to do it this way and I appreciate it.

As for how I did, I actually did get to the end but it was one of the most challenging teases I've ever done. It was so hard and frustrating to edge so many times in one sitting just to have to hold it back but I was more than happy to for Penny - I was hanging on her every word.

Simply put, an excellently written tease that is a perfect example of what a webtease should be.
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i've been lurking here for many years and I enjoyed this tease so much, I decided to post for the first time.

Amazing work, by far my favorite tease!


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Excellent written and a real challenge. Loved the tension. One of the best teases around here. I'm tempted to create my own offline copy for TeaseMe with Highres-Pictures. Just minor suggestion: More pics would be great and the first edge could have used a longer build up
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Brilliant work :-D
Yes, I most certainly CAN do it again!
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I'm going to have to be straight here. This was simply the best tease I've ever done. I've been around here for around 3 yrs, & don't post often. Until tonite my all time favorites that weren't part of a series were the ones from MR25 (deleted), but this was the best.

Awesome.

I sure hope there's a part 2.
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I'm glad you all liked it so much, I didn't see that coming :-)
I actually want to make a second part some time but it could take a while since I already spent several nights on this tease and am really busy at the moment...but we'll see.
With the pictures: I thought so myself that I actually could need some more pictures but I hadn't have any more that time...now I have some more of those galleries but I don't know if it makes sense to replace them now...
Anyway, I'm happy you appreciate the tease and the time with Penny :love:
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Post by janmb »

Regarding number of pictures, don't worry too much imo

In fact, having frequent updates like you did is what makes it good imo. Changing picture for every minor text/story update is unnecessary. Making sure pages don't last for too long tho is important and that's where you did really well.
Yes, I most certainly CAN do it again!
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Regarding the comments on the number of pictures, I'd much prefer the effort that you put into the tease rather than focusing on number of pictures. Yeah, at the start I noticed that the pics weren't changing often, but not so much later on.

One more comment: Penny Flame is a great choice.
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Bravo!! This was a fabulous Christmas present after a long hohum period. I can’t wait to experience more of your brilliance in the flash tease category. Well done!! I hope you are an inspiration for other authors to realize a 5 rating is possible.
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Awesome Tease!!! Definitely the best I've come across in a long time. I've always loved Penny Flame and you did an excellent job of making it seem like she was right there, loved the text and the pace of it. Hope you do make a sequel to it, I understand your busy and it may take quite a while, for those of us that made it all the through the tease I think we all know how to be patient and that good things come to those of us who wait!!! Thanks for making it!! :-)
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I gave it 5 stars, but in my humble opinion it really needs more pictures . Innovative use of flash,
still it is a visual media, the media is the message, ergo more pictures.
Bravo, encore!
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