Flashtease

tdrules · Post by **tdrules** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 5:29 am

I just published my 1st flash tease. 1st and foremost if there are any bugs or loops please let me know. I went through it but might have missed something.

This has been a idea in my head for a while and with my work schedule it took some time. I've got a day off tomorrow so going to write part 2 then..or at least the majority of it.

Comments?

By the way view in full screen some of the monologue is long and if not full screen you will miss it.

all2true · Post by **all2true** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 6:20 am

the tease is:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=13532
So you want to hire a Mistress

tdrules · Post by **tdrules** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 6:32 am

all2true wrote:the tease is:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=13532
So you want to hire a Mistress

Thanks all2true forgot to include the link...

all2true · Post by **all2true** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 6:55 am

Okay I see several "problems"
You have WAY WAY to content on one screen
to much writing
How am I to read that tiny font! ??

Personally, this just me, not to sure about your choice of models.
those super Fake tits are Not a turn on for me (personally)

chuckx11 · Post by **chuckx11** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 9:49 am

I'm with all2true about the models and the volume of text/screen, but I very much enjoyed the writing of the tease, it is the first in quite a while that has been really involving for me, and I genuinely wanted it to keep going and be longer. I for one am very much looking forward to/hoping for a sequel.

lolstick · Post by **lolstick** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 12:31 pm

I actually enjoyed the models very much. Also your writing is very good.
I do agree with too much text on one screen though, try spreading it out over more pages.

do continue this though i had a lot of fun with it!

bookworm · Post by **bookworm** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 1:28 pm

lolstick wrote: Also your writhing is very good!

That would be along with

Reeling, Writhing, Drawling, Stretching, and Fainting in Coils

lolstick · Post by **lolstick** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 10:28 pm

hehe oops! fixed

tdrules · Post by **tdrules** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 10:52 pm

Thanks everyone...it was my 1st flash tease and I agree that I put too much text on one page...thanks for the complements on the writing that's why I do these lol.

Everyone to their own on the models. I was looking more for scene and picture placements more than fake tits. I actually like the bigger tits myself. Sorry they don't please everyone.

majinvegeta87 · Post by **majinvegeta87** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 11:11 pm

all2true wrote:Okay I see several "problems"
You have WAY WAY to content on one screen
to much writing
How am I to read that tiny font! ??

Personally, this just me, not to sure about your choice of models.
those super Fake tits are Not a turn on for me (personally)

I totally agree with you about fake tits.

And thanks for this great tease.

fscguy · Post by **fscguy** » Thu Nov 17, 2011 7:38 pm

i can't wait to see more of this series.

chuckx11 · Post by **chuckx11** » Sat Nov 26, 2011 11:04 am

just wondering when we'll see part two to this tease, because I loved the first installment so much.

tdrules · Post by **tdrules** » Thu Dec 08, 2011 6:13 am

I've been trying to find a new apt and finally did, after tomorrow I'm off 10 days to move and get set back up. I'm going to try and do part 2 really soon.

Sorry for the delay...I've got most of the models and scene set up so just need to write the "script"

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