Hi I'm a newbie an wondered if i could get some feed back on my first attempt at a tease - schoolgirl control.
I cna't believe over 3000 people have looked at it in just over a day and wondered what some of you thought, and any advice on how to improve... Cheers Bobby
First tease-Schoolgirl control-feedback request
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First tease-Schoolgirl control-feedback request
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
I loved this tease, so thank you for making it and posting it
As for feedback,
I loved how it started with the innocent girl saying sorry for cheating, then moving on to say that she will be your "Teen Mistress" and how you are not the first. then she tell you how she got the others to worship her and how you will worship her.
The Story is great, but my only problem is that where do you go from here as you have enslaved the Head Master
Do you start a new story?
And yes I will be awaiting your next Tease, Please post soon
THANK YOU
As for feedback,
I loved how it started with the innocent girl saying sorry for cheating, then moving on to say that she will be your "Teen Mistress" and how you are not the first. then she tell you how she got the others to worship her and how you will worship her.
The Story is great, but my only problem is that where do you go from here as you have enslaved the Head Master
Do you start a new story?
And yes I will be awaiting your next Tease, Please post soon
THANK YOU
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
Thanks stafford, my first reply to my first tease and it's so positive.
I was thinking, that as she's obviously passes her exams,with flying colours: Her friend mentioned in the first tease comes in, and starts to financially blackmail the head, or maybe try an obtain a scholarship. They need the money for the uni fees the poor dears. And i'm sure they're going to get it....
thanks again, bobby
I was thinking, that as she's obviously passes her exams,with flying colours: Her friend mentioned in the first tease comes in, and starts to financially blackmail the head, or maybe try an obtain a scholarship. They need the money for the uni fees the poor dears. And i'm sure they're going to get it....
thanks again, bobby
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
There is one very important fact.
You tried! You created.
You are a winner.
How many gave you a bad mark, never posted a tease?
I dare those to do better.
Keep going.
Regards,
Mistress Kendoll
You tried! You created.
You are a winner.
How many gave you a bad mark, never posted a tease?
I dare those to do better.
Keep going.
Regards,
Mistress Kendoll
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
Thank you Mistress Kendoll, its really kind of you to reply.
Although I do really like being a loser, I fact i really love being a loser
, and around a sweet and sexy lady well i'm hopeless.
kind regards, bobby
Although I do really like being a loser, I fact i really love being a loser
kind regards, bobby
Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
I just read it and I liked it. Couldnt wank myself because I am locked up but I got a really painful boner now
;) The beginning and setting is great but it was to easy to turn the head master (me) around. It felt not "realistic".
Bye
;) The beginning and setting is great but it was to easy to turn the head master (me) around. It felt not "realistic".
Bye
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
thanks plissk3n, really pleased you liked it so much, I'm sorry you couldn't wank over it though - my problem was that i couldn't stop wanking. That and the fact it was my first attempt... well i think that may excuse the weakness of the turn around. But a painful boner inside a cage - I think thats what i'll regard as a success.
hope you check out the next one... the girls will be working the handmaster a little longer this time, hopefully. happy boner, bobby
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Re: First tease-Scoolgirl control-feedback request
Please continue to create.
Mistress Kendoll
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