"Are you think you have enough stamina?" (sic)
"Are you think you have enough stamina?" (sic)
The English in this tease was CORRECTED? Gimme a break. I do appreciate the effort exerted by the author, but this sort of tease just feels like "busy-work." Anyway, it's just one guy's opinion.
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Wow. Thanks for creating that, Qwert. I wish I had enough continuous, uninterrupted, private free time to try it out. The videos that you've linked to are especially nice.
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I'm not quite sure what Doink's point was supposed to be, but if that tease is going to be labeled as having its English "corrected" then it needs a lot more work.
I'm still having to mumble most of the "sentences" to myself and then take a moment to interpret what they're attempting to say.
Maybe that's what Doink meant by busy-work. If so, I agree.
So, thanks for the effort, both to the author and the editor, but perhaps it needs another try!
I'm still having to mumble most of the "sentences" to myself and then take a moment to interpret what they're attempting to say.
Maybe that's what Doink meant by busy-work. If so, I agree.
So, thanks for the effort, both to the author and the editor, but perhaps it needs another try!
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I chose not to view the tease because of the title. Maybe if it were changed to "Do you think..." then it would be okay, and I might give it a second chance. But as it stands, it's kind of a painful to try and read, "Are you think you have enough stamina?"
Are is reserved for multiple subjects, such as...
Are Jesse and Jamie going to the concert?
Are Billy and David going to have the stamina to last?
Or, if you want to stick with "are", then...
Are you going to have enough stamina to last this tease?
Are is reserved for multiple subjects, such as...
Are Jesse and Jamie going to the concert?
Are Billy and David going to have the stamina to last?
Or, if you want to stick with "are", then...
Are you going to have enough stamina to last this tease?
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Wow
At first, it was just funny because I kept hearing Borat's voice as I read it.
Then I started getting used to it... I didn't really see it as a plus, but the 'accent' was not nearly the downer I thought it would be...
in part because HOLY CRAP that's a hot tease. That was a lot of pages, and a lot of work, and a lot of shameless leverage of others' work.... great job!
One other thing was that, due to the random dice and looping, I thought it could be better as a flash tease (with maybe 'skip to next' buttons for cheaters like me). Instead of dice there could be range() commands. Of course, it would require the ability to open up other web teases in new windows, and maybe the ability to stream from youporn, and would probably be harder to write. The benefit would be that the user doesn't have to roll any dice... he just presses this 'roll' button and has no idea what the possible outcomes are, or his chances at being able to move on vs sent back.
Then I started getting used to it... I didn't really see it as a plus, but the 'accent' was not nearly the downer I thought it would be...
in part because HOLY CRAP that's a hot tease. That was a lot of pages, and a lot of work, and a lot of shameless leverage of others' work.... great job!
One other thing was that, due to the random dice and looping, I thought it could be better as a flash tease (with maybe 'skip to next' buttons for cheaters like me). Instead of dice there could be range() commands. Of course, it would require the ability to open up other web teases in new windows, and maybe the ability to stream from youporn, and would probably be harder to write. The benefit would be that the user doesn't have to roll any dice... he just presses this 'roll' button and has no idea what the possible outcomes are, or his chances at being able to move on vs sent back.
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Speaking of corrected
I got credit for the corrections (ouch!)
I was a bit tired trying to get it straitened out,
but I thought I did a better job (correcting) than what I read
Ah well.
English isn't always easy for me either!
Still it will take me days to get through the tease honestly
I don't think it's impossible
just a really long tease, like a series
Has anyone actually completed the entire tease without cheating?
also if anyone else wants to a crack at correcting the tease
fell free!
I got credit for the corrections (ouch!)
I was a bit tired trying to get it straitened out,
but I thought I did a better job (correcting) than what I read
Ah well.
English isn't always easy for me either!
Still it will take me days to get through the tease honestly
I don't think it's impossible
just a really long tease, like a series
Has anyone actually completed the entire tease without cheating?
also if anyone else wants to a crack at correcting the tease
fell free!
to thine own self be true
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Ok i know my English is really terrible. I live in Poland and my native English is Polish. German is my good side too but English i learn on my own hand.
I doing teases because i like it.
If someone have time and can correct mistakes then i be very happy.
It's not true that all2true not correct tease.If you cant understand that version then i really worry about my original
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Like its not true that I don't work on my teases. Only my knowledge about English is to small on this moment.
On the end i want say that i really learn lot writing teases and reading them after correction.
I have hope that one day i can write tease on my own hand and nobody must correct it.
ps. I can write tease in my native language but i really don't think anybody understand it.
I doing teases because i like it.
If someone have time and can correct mistakes then i be very happy.
It's not true that all2true not correct tease.If you cant understand that version then i really worry about my original
Like its not true that I don't work on my teases. Only my knowledge about English is to small on this moment.
On the end i want say that i really learn lot writing teases and reading them after correction.
I have hope that one day i can write tease on my own hand and nobody must correct it.
ps. I can write tease in my native language but i really don't think anybody understand it.
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Many People liked the tease
as you first did it.
Even me.
As for a tease in your language
Go for it!
as you first did it.
Even me.
As for a tease in your language
Go for it!
to thine own self be true
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Well, I will say that the title made me apprehensive. It sounded wrong & not "accent"ish. But i read the tease & really liked it. It did seem like an accent & therefore correct. So I aggree pay attnetion to grammer & spelling just so the teaser in the tease doesn't seem dumb. But this onw was good.
Also, absolutely submit one in your prefered language.
Also, absolutely submit one in your prefered language.
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Re: "Are you think you have enough stamina?" (sic)
My God, this tease is wonderful, I've just finisched only the first test, and my balls are right now very sore, I feel like they're exploding, but I can't continue right now, so I can't cum anche I have to continue in another moment. It's very long; when I have a lot of free time, I want to restart and to do all the tease in a row, I don't know if it's possibile or not
Sorry for my bad English
Sorry for my bad English

