Well, if you want to clear up confusion, add a few reminders that you can get to page 10. Also, you could change her line "you get send back alone" etc. to something like "I can't allow you to come... or else."

I don't see the point in wanting just one bad end, having multiple bad ends only adds ...

Very nice writing style again and quite a unique story I must say. But from Page 11 onwards, it's not clear where to go once you come. Also, she says that if you cum in the real world, only you get sent back, staying alone in the fiction world. If cum at this point, you can only go to page 10 ...

Oho, I didn't expect what I got when I opened this tease, it was a pleasant surprise for me. "Ohh, THAT 'Velvet Room'!"
"I have heard of people going to places where other people remove their clothing for money, watching you now is leading me to understand why they would do such a thing. This is ...

My second tease is up and running. Please leave me all the feedback you want, both positive and negative. I hope to continue to grow as a tease writer and to give back to the Milovana community as much as it has given me.

Thank you for your time and patience.

You absolutely should make more teases. Teases are what make Milovana's wheels turn. I would prefer some human beings in a few though. :-D All joking aside, I think it it is cool to see someone who has been lurking for so long decide to throw their hat in the ring and create some teases.

I liked ...

My first tease after a long long time lurking around and just going through the teases.

It was suggested to me that I make a forum topic so I can hear the feedback from all of you. So, here it is. Please let me know how I can improve for future teases, or if I should continue making teases for the ...