http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=11586

Tell me what you think or if you can help improve the text and make it more detailed.

What's the definition? I tried putting something together but it's more like a photostory. Is that alright?

I've got a good set of photos and a storyline. I'd just like some help to improve the text.

It's about a boy being punished by the head girl. Anyone willing to preview my story and help me with the dialogue?