hope you all like it
i will try to improve as time goes on
all constructive criticism welcomed
Its called "I'm in the Garden"
Just added my first tease..
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Just added my first tease..
Hi all
i am a sissy boy who just loves this type of teasing!!
i am a sissy boy who just loves this type of teasing!!
You did an excellent job on your first tease! Keep writing it got me very hot. When I write teases i try to fit different kinds of kinks into the tease. You did a good job with the balls punishment, still a little sore! try to do a little nipple tease, or spanking or whatever comes to mind to add to your next tease.
Have fun with it, i like the younger woman in control theme but anyone in control is good for me!
Have fun with it, i like the younger woman in control theme but anyone in control is good for me!
Enjoying the site and wish more people would take a stab at writing teases for the site!
For a first tease I must say it is great!
Excellent use of the pictures - the face-expression matches the text in pretty must every page! Well done!!
But just telling you that you do great wont help you improve, so I will suggest some point where you could improve: The story, your plot was very simple and easy to follow which is a good thing - But I would like a bit more story (Of course this means more creative work, and if I have to choose I would rather have more works from you than less works and more creativity)
The second thing you could improve on is length - It could be a bit longer I think... (There is a limitation in the number of pictures of course (But pictures can be reused somewhat)). And I guess I would always like good teases to be a bit longer, lol.
I must confess I had to think quite a bit about these improvements, it isnt easy to point out flaws in your tease - Good job!
Excellent use of the pictures - the face-expression matches the text in pretty must every page! Well done!!
But just telling you that you do great wont help you improve, so I will suggest some point where you could improve: The story, your plot was very simple and easy to follow which is a good thing - But I would like a bit more story (Of course this means more creative work, and if I have to choose I would rather have more works from you than less works and more creativity)
The second thing you could improve on is length - It could be a bit longer I think... (There is a limitation in the number of pictures of course (But pictures can be reused somewhat)). And I guess I would always like good teases to be a bit longer, lol.
I must confess I had to think quite a bit about these improvements, it isnt easy to point out flaws in your tease - Good job!
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thanks for your comments, i will try to take them on board for next time!!
as a guide to others / explanantion of what i did is as follows -
i did a quick search through some photos off "thehun" http://www.thehun.com
then i tried to think of a story which match the pictures (you are quite right that there wasn't that many photos so i had to make it a bit shorter than i would like!!)
i believe that if you can make a story a little believable then it adds to the whole tease/denial, as you can imagine it happening to you.
the more a tease can wake your imagination, the better your mind can see
Don't forget that a mans dick is not the biggest sex organ in your body - it is your brain!!!!!!
anyway, sorry for waffling on, maybe i should get on with creating another tease better and bigger.......... :-)
as a guide to others / explanantion of what i did is as follows -
i did a quick search through some photos off "thehun" http://www.thehun.com
then i tried to think of a story which match the pictures (you are quite right that there wasn't that many photos so i had to make it a bit shorter than i would like!!)
i believe that if you can make a story a little believable then it adds to the whole tease/denial, as you can imagine it happening to you.
the more a tease can wake your imagination, the better your mind can see
Don't forget that a mans dick is not the biggest sex organ in your body - it is your brain!!!!!!
anyway, sorry for waffling on, maybe i should get on with creating another tease better and bigger.......... :-)
Hi all
i am a sissy boy who just loves this type of teasing!!
i am a sissy boy who just loves this type of teasing!!
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