Can't stop staring - Feedback

[gestalt]

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Hey guys, just wondered if my tease did anything for anybody? I know its a breast obsessed but each to his own eh? Any feedback would be greatly appreciated...

[seraph0x]

Ok, first of all, I want to let the numbers speak:

Your tease is the most popular of the whole site right now. Don't ask me why, but it got 5273 pageviews so far (~500 people have seen it.)

So congratulations for that.

I just tried it and I also thought it was pretty cool.

There is strange sentence on page two. (It's the last of the longer sentences.) I think you wrote "put" when you meant "but". So, maybe you wanna correct that.

But the storyline, instructions and pics are really awesome and justify the tease's current No1 position.

You definitely have a talent for this. Did you write teases back at od.com, too?

To the other tease authors: Please don't be put off by this , I've only started collecting the stats two days ago, so the older teases have a little disadvantage. (Asian Fire is on the last place with 1245 pvs...)

EDIT: Two people registered here right after seeing your tease btw. ^^

[gestalt]

Cheers for the feedback Seraph, you are too generous! Whilst I've never written a tease before, I have been 'lurking' on OD for some time so kind of know what its all about. I'm actually an author in real life so thought it was high time I gave something back to the community!

[slavedave51]

I thought it was great. Other than the spelling mistakes it's quite well-written. Interesting concept, too, a little different from the usual. I wish it had gone on with the group -- maybe in part 2?

Actually I thought it was going to end with a giant closeup on the last page, something you really *couldn't* take your eyes off of. Your idea was better.

dave

[dark]

Hi Gestalt. A very nice tease. I like Ewa from busty.pl She is cute. Where you found these pics? I tried the page, but there were only examples. No series

[gestalt]

Firstly, apologies for the spelling mistakes, I constructed the tease one night whilst quite drunk, and it never does my typing any good! As for the series of Ewa, it wasn't on busty.pl it came from a link on the BadGirlsBlog page but I just checked and they've since updated and removed the beautiful Ewa All the pics in the series were in the tease though so you're not missing out on any extras!

[seraph0x]

I constructed the tease one night whilst quite drunk

[someone43]

EDIT: Two people registered here right after seeing your tease btw. ^^

I'm one of them!!!

This tease if AMAZING!!!!

You should get drunk more often!

[gestalt]

I get drunk rather too often already I think! But I'll certainly be writing more teases from now on!

[kl2003]

You can add me to the number of people who have registered because of this tease. It is one of (if not the most) amazing teases I have ever gone through.

I look forward to more from you.

[tease_o_phile]

I have to agree with the others too...

Specifically, I love the way you had the tease follow a story - I like the challange that she was putting forward and the eroticism to the whole thing.

I hope you take the opportunity to write some more! I enjoyed it!

tease_o_phile