[Feedback] Secret Desires

[Beta_on_a_Journey]

Let's keep it short: I released a Tease!

I wanted to do this for a very long time. It's more of an interactive story, themed around Cuckolding, Chastity and Femdom.
The Tease has several chapters, all together are about 2h long. I worked around 100h on it and it contains 500+ pictures.

I would be honored to receive your feedback wether it be your thoughts regarding the story, new ideas or possible bugs.

Have a great day and keep teasing!

[Pietjansen]

Please keep on making them like this,I loved to play it it was so well put together

[ritewriter]

Nice work.

I've only done the first two chapters so far, but a note or two, FWIW. Just my thoughts. Ignore them if they don't seem fun.

1. I don't love the long timers with nothing to look at like in the strip club bathroom. If you're going to give a long timer, give me something sexy to look at (or avoid them altogether, which is what I do.)

2. I'd like to see how the MC's fetish begins, with maybe more background or a slower ramp up. He just already has the fetish with no explanation. So when he first is alone and tempted to surf porn, I'd love to see him either stumble across the cuckold porn or maybe have the computer open up right to it (because his fiancée secretly put it there). Or at least have him start with regular porn, then somehow get tempted into cuck porn. If feel like this is supposed to be a "slippery slope" style tease and he's already well down the slope when it starts.

3. I'm not sure right now if any of the choices have real consequences. For example it doesn't seem to matter what you ask the stripper to do with you. Or what you think your Alexis' boyfriend is into. There are several times when I was given options, and it seemed like no matter what I clicked on, the next dialogue was going to happen regardless. When a teases gives me choices, I like to feel like the things I do matter, otherwise it feels false.

Terrific model choices and general story shape! Keep at it!

[SissyFace]

Amazing tease. Loved the slow build of tension, like a boiled frog. I think the timers help sell that. Really good work.

[AFro62]

The timers are too much. Probably a great tease but Im not going to wait that long. I hate all timers anyway so I'm probably in the minority.

[Robstark8891]

Love the tease amazing work!! Hoping you plan to expand or create more soon!!! Only request would be that maybe you could choose the name of the guy who takes your girl, same way you can choose her name, and maybe some different paths/options that change up the story for replay ability!

[subfootboy890]

Honestly thought it was great -- the storyline was fun, the whole thing was very hot, and I'd definitely be interested to see any follow ups on this or future teases you put together.

I did want to echo the suggestion that it might be fun to have the choices you make influence what happens/what you see later; I feel like that might also up the replayability of it.

[Campione54xg]

Really good tease! Though as others have said I would like more if there were less timers and if the choices influenced more the story but otherwise is a great tease, keep up the good work mate.

[Beta_on_a_Journey]

Thank you so much for the feedback so far!

I mostly take away two things for me to improve on - interactivity and timers.

This being my first tease, I needed to get familiar with the features of EOS teases first. The tease was also created from a story I once wrote (I actually combined two stories but that's not the point) so it was a linear story adapted into a tease which made it harder to implement different narrative paths. But - some choices do matter and lead to a different experience of the story and there are several different endings, although one is obviously the main ending.

I implemented timers mainly for narrative pacing and to give the player time to actually jerk off when the story demands for it. I totally get how this is not for everybody, so that's absolutely a valid criticism.

For the people who enjoyed the tease - worry not. I have a lot of stories to tell, I just searched for the right medium to do so. I am already working on the next tease and I am pretty optimistic about it. I dipped my toes into more advanced interactivity features and they seem to work well, so I plan on my next tease to be more interactive and with several distinct endings.

Not sure how long it will take me but I will get there eventually.

Have fun and keep teasing!

[joijoijoi111]

Thank you so much for the feedback so far!

I mostly take away two things for me to improve on - interactivity and timers.

This being my first tease, I needed to get familiar with the features of EOS teases first. The tease was also created from a story I once wrote (I actually combined two stories but that's not the point) so it was a linear story adapted into a tease which made it harder to implement different narrative paths. But - some choices do matter and lead to a different experience of the story and there are several different endings, although one is obviously the main ending.

I implemented timers mainly for narrative pacing and to give the player time to actually jerk off when the story demands for it. I totally get how this is not for everybody, so that's absolutely a valid criticism.

For the people who enjoyed the tease - worry not. I have a lot of stories to tell, I just searched for the right medium to do so. I am already working on the next tease and I am pretty optimistic about it. I dipped my toes into more advanced interactivity features and they seem to work well, so I plan on my next tease to be more interactive and with several distinct endings.

Not sure how long it will take me but I will get there eventually.

Have fun and keep teasing!

I just completed the tease, and this is FANTASTIC. I really enjoyed it and i think this is one of the better teases on this site.
I do agree with ritewriter about how you can improve, so im really looking forward to your next stories

[Campione54xg]

Thank you so much for the feedback so far!

I mostly take away two things for me to improve on - interactivity and timers.

This being my first tease, I needed to get familiar with the features of EOS teases first. The tease was also created from a story I once wrote (I actually combined two stories but that's not the point) so it was a linear story adapted into a tease which made it harder to implement different narrative paths. But - some choices do matter and lead to a different experience of the story and there are several different endings, although one is obviously the main ending.

I implemented timers mainly for narrative pacing and to give the player time to actually jerk off when the story demands for it. I totally get how this is not for everybody, so that's absolutely a valid criticism.

For the people who enjoyed the tease - worry not. I have a lot of stories to tell, I just searched for the right medium to do so. I am already working on the next tease and I am pretty optimistic about it. I dipped my toes into more advanced interactivity features and they seem to work well, so I plan on my next tease to be more interactive and with several distinct endings.

Not sure how long it will take me but I will get there eventually.

Have fun and keep teasing!

I am really looking forward to it keep up the good work mate, I also didn't know there were different endings, now I gotta to try it haha.

[Campione54xg]

I just wondered, you said the choices affect somehow the ending but how does that work if there isn't some sort of save? from what I saw the game doesn't load from where you were, may it will affect the ending only if it considered the last chapter.

[ithinkiheardsomeone]

It seems very interesting but the timers kinda ruined it for me. My attention span doesn't allow me to wait 10 seconds for an interaction, a new image or some new text. :D So I couldn't make it past chapter 1, unfortunately.

[IvaneBra]

absolute top tier tease.
I played it several times and i am looking forward for more.

What I loved:
- slow build up
- the story in general
- the pictures used were very suitable to the situation displayed
- the female not beeing to aggressive and always seem friendly (personal view: I dont like to dominante women at the beginning)
- the different ways

What can be changed in future teases / Ideas
- In my opinion the female friend didnt had such a big backstory. (for example why not make her friend also bull - and laughing at her friend for getting such a looser)
- maybe in an other story its the female friend that convinces the main character or the bull

tldr: great tease please please more <3

[imtoosexy]

The setup, the story, the build up, the pictures, the sounds. Great tease!

I also like how a revisit could easily add story lines, because of the multiple answer options. But it doesn't need a revisit. All answers subtly leading to the same responses and outcomes actually adds to the femdom. The loving but dominant sub-genre is also my personal favorite.

Apart from some grammar edits like threated and ginding, maybe I would add some picture refinements. Like the phone image is referred to as his phone and later as her phone, which would be better as two pics. Maybe she could refer to your name a bit more, but this is trying to come up with feedback when this tease is really just amazing.

Thank you for creating this tease !

I was playing around with the pictures a bit, just for fun, I added them here to anyone's liking or inspiration.

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attempt to add club background to imagination

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attempt to add club background of private area and add blur for imagination

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chastity

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chastity unpack

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attempt to increase movement to image and add character

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attempt to decrease light and stock photo character

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The end, ty again :)

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