[FEEDBACK] Train that butt!

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[FEEDBACK] Train that butt!

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I don't see much in this particular niche so I finally decided to do something about that. Hopefully those of you that like furries and butt stuff enjoy this.

It's my first tease so let me know what you think!
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Hey! I thought this tease was fantastic, really enjoyed it. I'm glad someone else is making anal+furry content on here!

My only feedback is that the plug section at the beginning was kinda just... a dildo section except using a plug instead. I'd have to spend some time thinking about it to know exactly what could be different, but maybe some stuff with clenching/pushing? Probably for a future tease though, since this one easily earned its 5 stars from me. Excellent picture selection, too.
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Thank you! Now that you mention it the plug section could use some improvement. Butt hey, live and learn. I'm glad you liked it though. It was your Take That Knot tease that pushed me to actually make an account so I could vote for it in the TOTM poll.
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To be honest I prefer Silver Slut version.

- Only tease I know that includes knot play. (If you know other places, please, let me know)
- Option to make it more straight.
- More semi-furry/non-furry images.
- More pauses.

But you are doing better:
- Less focus on standard masturbation.
- Finger warm up.

Issues:
Just finger penetration without explanation how you could do it, without finger progression, without stretch, and too short.
Plug penetration isn't the best idea for warm up. Especially for beginners. No longer holding of that plug.
During penetration phases, no pauses for lube up, or breath catch, position change.
Too fast penetration on bigger toy after change from smaller.
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I don't really see this one as a "different version" of mine. Mine was a "build up to the goal" kind of tease, this one was a relentless trainer, meant to train your stamina as much as your stretchiness. :P

I suppose, though, that I have a thought on the fingering section, now that Doumyoji mentions it. If you make a sequel (as I said before, I think this one is pretty good, not needing a huge revamp), you could consider doing a bit more with the fingers, for instance:
  • Going beyond two fingers
  • Using fingers from both hands to alternate insertions
  • Spreading fingers to widen your ass
  • (GENTLY) pulling your ass open with both hands
I stole these ideas from Batman314's "The Protectors" tease, which is regrettably abandoned (probably just a bit too ambitious).
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Oh ye. "Version" was a bad word. I should say "game" or sth like that.

Somewhere I had nice tutorial for stretch anus, but #1 dunno if I can link here, #2 I need to find it.
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Lots of good ideas here, thank you. I made it mostly for my tastes and what I am already comfortable with so no surprise it doesn't quite line up for other people. I see plenty of ways to improve the next one though.

What did you think of the dialogue? I've never tried writing any kind of dirty talk before so that took a long time to flesh out and not feel dumb.
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I thought the dialogue was pretty good! I actually appreciate it when it's not over-the-top, a little kinder/more playful than the "worthless cuck, tiny-dicked loser" that you sometimes get. Degradation isn't my kink.
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